Mistress Mary

Love it

Mmmmmmm. Slipped into a little dress and lingerie to read it a second and third time.
Amanda
Crossdresser

Very Well Written

Keep it up, you're doing great. Maybe introduce some strapon play and feminizing

couldn't keep reading

past the part where he was licking her asshole and for some reason this chick was so dirty she can't even keep her ass clean.

Guys into femdom want to worship a goddess.... not a dirty slob. Turn off.

I'm sure the rest of the story was fantastic, just couldn't stand her character past the dirty butthole.

Very very dirty. But it made me cum very hard.

Good1

My husband loves to drink my piss and smell my farts. We both love this story. We're going to try some of these things that you write about. He's really excited.
So am I.

Basic idea = good

A woman turning a guy into a piss-drinking, shit- and cum-eating toilet slave is good but the telling of it leaves a little bit to be desired. Maybe try reading it out loud and see where it races too fast or skips moments that should be detailed.

James

I'm 12 and i love this looool

my greatest fantasy!

yes, story no one is my greatest fantasy.