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by BigB8802/05/13

Needs a lot of work

It could have been good, but there were far too many spelling/grammar errors. I would also recommend stretching out the story a little with details or more variety in what is going on, unless you were going for something really short.

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by oldefarte02/06/13

find an editor

good concept but very distracting grammatical errors.
i.e. paragraph 2 line 1 "While typing she [mad] moved one [had] to her bottom to fix her short skirt,"

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