I loved the first stanza of this because of its unusual use of language. Because I was interested in what came next, it drew me in. But reading the rest of the poem makes me wonder if Their in the first stanza is misspelled in the first three lines (they're). Intentional or not? Hard to say. Overall - I liked the idea.
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