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ReiDeBastosReiDeBastosabout 11 years ago
Nice, but needs editing

Many problems, both small (the word is "shudder", not "shutter") and not-so-small (switching back and forth between referring to the woman as "her" and then as "you").

I am living life in a wheelchair as well, and was pleased at how that was incorporated into the story without it being a big deal.

Another thing that was interesting: Althugh I don't think it was explicitly stated, I got the imprression that the woman was black, and the man caucasian (although I might have read myself into it) but again, a big deal was not made of it - nice.

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