All Comments on 'A Better Place to Be'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
good one

please continue with this story line. Even though she ws too easy hopefully she will give him back his confidence. hope it works out for him.

THANK YOU

Sidney43Sidney43about 11 years ago

Agree, this could be woven into a nice story over several chapters. Some development of their respective backgrounds and why they are attracted to each other beyond the one night sex. What was it about Edward that made her want to go home with him and how do they deal with the difference in ages as they continue on in the developing relationship. There could be some interesting dialog with co-workers and friction between Amanda and her friends when and if they interact as a couple. You have written a great short story, which is satisfying like a mid day snack, but it begs to be presented as a five course dinner with a fine brandy to top the evening off.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Very Good Writing

especially for a first effort! It reads realisticly, like "Been there and done that." Hope you continue with a romance that kills the "age difference elephant."

DebradmlDebradmlalmost 11 years ago
Captivating read!

Whoa...what a beautiful story, I really hope there is s'more! Well done ;-)

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
Good story

This story is begging for a part 2 who knows where this could go!

AnonymousAnonymousover 7 years ago
better place to be wow

I shure hope you dont leav us hanging hear and make a second on this one so they can get to gether or more my mind is going wild with what could be and I love storys like this with it being older wemen and yuonger men or yuonger wemen and older men that find love. you have a real gift I love that you share all of your storeis with us

five is to low for storeis like this I think thay should get a 50 and more if you keep the story going for a few more chapters from DC stallhand

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