As I say in the title, this gets us off to a good start. I like that you indicate in this first episode that there's a past that we can expect to hear more of as well as a potentially thrilling future, I like that she is excited both by the bondage and by being exhibited. The only complaint I have is that this is so short. It feels like the "amuse-bouche" one receives at the start of a meal in a very fine restaurant: the flavours are enticing but this is not the meal, not even the first course, just a small something to sharpen the appetite. Please continue.
Thank you for your feedback. Fair point, I guess it is a bit of an amuse-bouche, but the first course will follow soon. I wanted to post this without waiting, and to see what, if any, response I might get to my style of writing. I tend to be slow on action and and a lot of focus on being inside the characters' heads. Not for everyone, and perhaps I need to have a better balance.
But thank you for taking the trouble to comment
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a very promising beginning
As I say in the title, this gets us off to a good start. I like that you indicate in this first episode that there's a past that we can expect to hear more of as well as a potentially thrilling future, I like that she is excited both by the bondage and by being exhibited. The only complaint I have is that this is so short. It feels like the "amuse-bouche" one receives at the start of a meal in a very fine restaurant: the flavours are enticing but this is not the meal, not even the first course, just a small something to sharpen the appetite. Please continue.
response to Anonymous - 'too short'
Thank you for your feedback. Fair point, I guess it is a bit of an amuse-bouche, but the first course will follow soon. I wanted to post this without waiting, and to see what, if any, response I might get to my style of writing. I tend to be slow on action and and a lot of focus on being inside the characters' heads. Not for everyone, and perhaps I need to have a better balance.
But thank you for taking the trouble to comment
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