All Comments on 'Cold Feet'

by demure101

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Ashesh9Ashesh9about 11 years ago
He knocked , she heard.....

He waited .... She dithered .... Slowly he went .... Poignant .....5-ed .

Butterflies512Butterflies512about 11 years ago

Getting what you want, especially long pined for love, can be the scariest thing ever...I weep for her missing her chance. I do not intend to miss mine, no matter how scared I am...

DawnJDawnJabout 11 years ago
Reminiscent of Walter de la Mare

"Is there anybody there? said the Traveler, knocking on the moonlit door." Yours is a wonderful echo of that poem, though of course the situations of each speaker is vastly different. Cool!

Oldbear63Oldbear63about 10 years ago
Sad, sad

Beautifully written, nicely rhymed without contrivance.

subtleperfumesubtleperfumeover 8 years ago
I recognise the inspiration of de la Mare as well...

There are also echoes - intentional or not - of the bitter sorrow of Dickens' Miss Havisham.

Having said that, your verse has a loveliness and poignancy of its own.

Bellej2009Bellej2009about 7 years ago
Realistic - Lost opportunities

It reminds me of the few times in my life when, because of fear, I have failed to act.

BelleJ

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