The simple sentences, monosyllabic vocabulary and theme bludgeon of 'literotica story into actual event' didn't do it for me.
the excitement of anonymous, but hardcore sex. Very well written and begs for a follow.
Sometimes a short story that sticks to the point is exactly what I need. Thanks!
this story is so intriguing.. i love how it keeps you waiting but not to like a maddening point like with some stories..
Good story mate, keep writing this series with the next installment. I loved it being simple in writing, I write in a similar fashion for ease, but also to describe things. Maybe in the next installment, her secret admirer takes her whilst she's on a busy train, or when she's sitting on a busy bus. He can do a bit more to her perhaps.
Great work! :D
I saw that this was only one ppage so i was afraind it would be a wham bam thank you man but instead you opened up beautifully at the end, allowing all kind of intrigue and mystery. I LOVED IT
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