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Great job with the dialogue. It's a dimension of written erotica that often gets overlooked.

You idiot. Need entertainment? Go to a movie and stop abusing him.

She really has no love or respect for him. She's simply interested in what he can do for her. This relationship is too one-sided. Sven needs to take a hike -permanently.

Interesting premise.

But the submission is too rushed. Too automatic.

There needed to be a lot more in the way of preliminaries before he gave in fully.

Tease him with her breasts. Make him worship them. Make him beg to go further.

Tease his cock with her hand/s. And his balls. Needs dialog about hat she's doing, how it feels to him, how it feels to her.

Needs her making him give her an orgasm (or more) with his fingers, and his mouth, before she lets him cum.

Four stars.