Stop badgering the writer if you are so blooming good go and write your own story.
It is far better to have shorter chapters, well written and edited by a writer who has thought through their story than page after page of mindless poorly written drivel.
I look forward to seeing how the story develops well done Sayshon.
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Anonymous02/15/13
Agree
I agree with Honour. Your stories might be short but they captivating and well written. really enjoying them.
Good story line,but super short chapters,took all of maybe 3 minutes at most to read,the first 2 could have made one.Its nice to have a few pages to get wrapped up in.Longer would be much nicer....thanks.
Describe what Peter looks like, give us the Professor's last name, tell us what kind of car Lashaya drives. What kind of bar is La Luna? What do the other workers think of Peter? Has Lashaya found him attractive in the past? Does she find him attractive now? Details, details, details.
Editor!!!! You need one. The story is a good one although she is pretty stupid not to get that one minute Peter is standing there fully dressed then suddenly there is a wolf where he was standing and then Peter again nude! Duh if nothing else his name should have given her a clue Lupo and the name of the bar was another obvious clue.
English
Nice but longer
You have a good theme going but your submissions are too short.
Great Story....
But the one page at a time is a readers' nightmare. Please post more.
want more
its a good, but please make the submissions longer
Oh for goodness sake
Stop badgering the writer if you are so blooming good go and write your own story.
It is far better to have shorter chapters, well written and edited by a writer who has thought through their story than page after page of mindless poorly written drivel.
I look forward to seeing how the story develops well done Sayshon.
Agree
I agree with Honour. Your stories might be short but they captivating and well written. really enjoying them.
well done
as the saying goes short and sweet keep up the good work
Loved IT
This story looks to be going somewhere. Look forward to the next installment not matter how long or short it is.
Love it
I just found this story and fell in love with it. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Thanks for the update.
why
why did it take 2 chapters to tell what could have been done in 1
Really good start
I am loving the start of the story. Keep up the good work I will happily following what could be a amazing story. :)
Short
Good story line,but super short chapters,took all of maybe 3 minutes at most to read,the first 2 could have made one.Its nice to have a few pages to get wrapped up in.Longer would be much nicer....thanks.
Details
Describe what Peter looks like, give us the Professor's last name, tell us what kind of car Lashaya drives. What kind of bar is La Luna? What do the other workers think of Peter? Has Lashaya found him attractive in the past? Does she find him attractive now? Details, details, details.
One word
Editor!!!! You need one. The story is a good one although she is pretty stupid not to get that one minute Peter is standing there fully dressed then suddenly there is a wolf where he was standing and then Peter again nude! Duh if nothing else his name should have given her a clue Lupo and the name of the bar was another obvious clue.
More
I'm excited to see where your going with this. Please we need more then one page and more details
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