The excessive exclamation marks and capitalized letters detract from the story quite a bit. Take the line 'I tell my new friend; "That is so FUCKING HOT!!!!" I also have a wife that fucks...' for example.
What I gather from that is the first three words are spoken in the same manner one would make small talk, then 'FUCKING HOT!!!!' is screamed out with the same sense of urgency as one would with 'FIRE!!!!' which to me adds (I assume unintentionally) quite the comical aspect to the story.
I "loved" it when he gets permission to fuck this slut from his wife who has a pussy full of someone else's cum. Really? What was the last part about, some kind of inside joke? If you'd have taken time for some descriptive sex there could have been some purpose to this story. As it is you probably should have sent a personal story to the person it was intended for and save cyber space from more garbage.
It really is a turn off. Open marriages and risky behavior ,just could not read it thru. Real crap.r
I don't care about the morals, but the writing was infantile.
Because I am confussed.
He's married to a slut who fucks a lot while he is gone on business trips, that much I know, but what was so good about the girl he fucked in his room?
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