Ditto the last comment. This is a thoroughly adorable story thus far. Luke is the kid I was trying to be in high school, except I never did pull it off. (I'm a verbal person, not a math person, but the principle holds.) So, as you can imagine, I'm rooting for him big-time. And for Kaylee too, truth be told. I hope she's able to break out of the great trap of other peoples' expectations and become her own person. :)
Onward to Chapter 2!
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Anonymous03/23/13
Great
Loving it already so far. I'm a girl, so I naturally like the hot guy, nerdy girl stories more. But this one is amazing already. I love it. Grammar, diction, etc. all perfect. Great set up, to which I have a lot to look forward. The characters are adorable, maybe a bit far fetched, but that's what stories are for, right? Also the "porographic memory" and "that D is almost within reach" were hilarious.
To this point, I love everything.
20 :D's / 23 :D's
Keep up the awesome work! :)
Love, LaLaLadidahGirl (that's my username- I'm not logged in currently)
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Anonymous04/08/13
we do those kind of questions in 4th grade. no wonder american economy is going to the dogs. apart from that, well written.
-an Indian without a call centre employee accent.
Good setup, with likeable characters and some crisp dialog. Hollywood-style "opposites attract" plotline, but not too sappy, for all that.
Oh, and as for the simplicity of the example equation, l think the author just wanted to avoid bogging the narrative down in a lengthy lecture on math theory
This is porn, after all. Something other than the illustrating language is supposed to be "hard".
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Anonymous01/07/14
Will read more, but that math stuff was on the niveau of 13 year olds, which either means she is a colossal idiot or wherever the author is from the school system is a bit slow.
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Anonymous02/06/14
Really fizzles toward the end
An okay read for people who like their erotic fiction PG rated and with a good sized dose of religious references. Everyone else should skip. Not much in the way of character development outside of the two mains, and by the end, even they behave uncharacteristically. There's just a lot of build up that doesn't go anywhere.
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Anonymous07/06/15
DO NOT BOTHER
I HAVE BEEN A LONG TIME READER OF LIT, THIS Story is Great until the Author takes the easy way out and is now responsible for wasting 2 hours of my life, please do not waste your time continuing on with this story.
English
Can't wait for more!
I like this a lot. I'm looking forward to more...
but I just have to say, I was doing that kind of algebra equation at school when I was 12! And I'm no maths geek. Is Kaylee really that far behind?
You got me.
Just finished Part I of Chapter 1 and you got me. Great hook. Now I've got to hurry back to read the rest.
Chauser's barrel maker
Ditto the last comment. This is a thoroughly adorable story thus far. Luke is the kid I was trying to be in high school, except I never did pull it off. (I'm a verbal person, not a math person, but the principle holds.) So, as you can imagine, I'm rooting for him big-time. And for Kaylee too, truth be told. I hope she's able to break out of the great trap of other peoples' expectations and become her own person. :)
Onward to Chapter 2!
Great
Loving it already so far. I'm a girl, so I naturally like the hot guy, nerdy girl stories more. But this one is amazing already. I love it. Grammar, diction, etc. all perfect. Great set up, to which I have a lot to look forward. The characters are adorable, maybe a bit far fetched, but that's what stories are for, right? Also the "porographic memory" and "that D is almost within reach" were hilarious.
To this point, I love everything.
20 :D's / 23 :D's
Keep up the awesome work! :)
Love, LaLaLadidahGirl (that's my username- I'm not logged in currently)
we do those kind of questions in 4th grade. no wonder american economy is going to the dogs. apart from that, well written.
-an Indian without a call centre employee accent.
Fun and sweet.
Good setup, with likeable characters and some crisp dialog. Hollywood-style "opposites attract" plotline, but not too sappy, for all that.
Oh, and as for the simplicity of the example equation, l think the author just wanted to avoid bogging the narrative down in a lengthy lecture on math theory
This is porn, after all. Something other than the illustrating language is supposed to be "hard".
Will read more, but that math stuff was on the niveau of 13 year olds, which either means she is a colossal idiot or wherever the author is from the school system is a bit slow.
Really fizzles toward the end
An okay read for people who like their erotic fiction PG rated and with a good sized dose of religious references. Everyone else should skip. Not much in the way of character development outside of the two mains, and by the end, even they behave uncharacteristically. There's just a lot of build up that doesn't go anywhere.
DO NOT BOTHER
I HAVE BEEN A LONG TIME READER OF LIT, THIS Story is Great until the Author takes the easy way out and is now responsible for wasting 2 hours of my life, please do not waste your time continuing on with this story.
Great Expectations.
Very intriguing start, exceptionally written. This story could be a real winner.
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