Cost of an Oath

bull s....

you are a wimp man every time i think that you are going to take the bull by the horns you go and wimp yourself allway taking the life of your main man suicide is not the answer because the cheating spouse allways walk a way free of the husband and star her LIVE over with somebody

Despite the death i loved the fact that the wife got the fucking she wnated - she was now a forced whore in south america and would soon get aids and every other disease and die in pain and agony. works for me.

Chill, guys! This was based on a true story

The guy took the easy option, true. But I can't criticise him.

If it's really true

Then it's a real tragedy for the husband. If not, he was a fucking coward wimp married to a cheating whore.

A coward's way out?

There was a man in northern Maryland who lost all three of his boys in an auto accident. A few months after they were buried he blew his head off. Bradley never recovered from the loss of his son. Too bad, this shit happens. I gave you a good rating, but didn't want to. I'm just glad it was short.

Man up!

For a guy that faced down drug lords he sure seemed to cave easily to a cheating wife. Why not plan well, divorce her and take everything and just disappear? Or let her go to South America and get used? Sure some people can't live with the pressure, but you set this guy up to be far stronger than that, yet he killed himself? Doesn't track.

It's**

A read.

don't understand

Killing himself?? For a "tough" guy with his background, having faced several dangerous situations, handling a cheating bitch should have been very easy. His son was dead, he should have taken all the money he could and just have disappeared, building a new life somewhere. After some time, he could have sneaked back and taken revenge on her and some of her lovers, even in south america (after all he has been in undercover operations before).

Payback?

Payback?

MattblackUK i do not think you understand English, there was no payback and your character killed him self,is it the English words that give you pause? In no way does this gibberish make sense "oh Ive spilled my milk i must end it all for the sake of the dog"---? that's your story, wow you taught her a lesson and carried on your sons name he will be remembered....seriously..... well if that's your plot twist carry on, i cant wait for the next one.. she burned dinner well that's it for me then ill show her "glick".. its a 1 rating

Not finished

Maybe you should have enlightened us concerning "the life of a 'Meretriz Inglês' in Rio", because I have no idea what that phrase means. Some sort of whore who is abused every day, or something?

meretriz = prostitute

since yall speak ingles, yall can figger that one out.

WTF?

He's gonna hold his breath till he turns blue? Just exactly how is this going to payback his wife if she really doesn't give a crap if he turns blue or not?

Really loved it in the end.

Not Much

Sorry, the story line was a little weak and the ending made no sense.

USUALLY THE COST SHOULD BE SHARED

and not solo-ed. TK U MLJ LV NV

What a fucking loser the husband was

Big time tough guy detective had no clue his heartless CUNT wife was cheating on him for 5 fucking years and then his big payback is to kill himself. LOSER! She didn't care about him and neither did her CUNT friends so who cares if he kills himself. That's perfect for the CUNT. of course that explains why the wife was cheating and held him in contempt. HE WAS A COWARD LOSER! The writer should follow. Pathetic and empty! what a waste

Wimp out

I always thought the RMPs were a bunch of whimp outs!

Thats not even a story, I noticed this 'writer' comments on how bad other writers are, yet he can't be fucking bothered to actually write a beginning, middle and END to a story.

He took the easy way out...

He took the easy way out...And for what? The destiny of his cheating wife was traced for a long time!!! Even if he didn't commit suicide she would go to Rio and become a whore, and he would be free from her forever...2*

CUTTING OFF YOUR NOSE TO SPITE YOUR FACE SEEMS SILLY

but suicide is helpful for no-one. TK U MLJ LV NV

Loser

2 stars only because she met a sad fate, but why should he have to die?

Better that he publicly shame her, then dump her ass and let her go whore out in Rio.

disconnected

This is a short flash story but the husband's suicide and the wife's demise are disconnected. Her demise is really based on one of her lovers not being what he seemed.
The story might be based on truth but you are still writing a story and you need to connect his suicide as being the cause of her demise. The story is what matters not the facts. (and let's face it, if we are dealing with some drug busting supercop with tons of high tech surveillance equipment lying around in his garage, we are not really concerned with facts in the first place, are we.)

Stupid

If the husband had the skills and connections listed in the story he could have arranged for the wife to suffer big time. Him offing himself was totally out of character. Rotten story with no redeeming factors.

What

With his background and training and how the story began, I thought he was going to let everyone think she ran away and then have a long private talk with her - just before he buried her in his sons grave?

I gave you a two, only because it seems as though you could write well...guessing, of course!

suicide like this involves a deep psychological problem

there was nothing in your character sketch of him to justify the action. Indeed, what little background you gave contradicts his behavior.

Another two

Dull

The suicide of the former soldier is based on a real story

He found his wife was cheating on him and all his military training made no difference to him. He killed himself.

And his damn wife got off with sympathy of her friends.

Now, that's not fair, but it is real life, sadly.

Too Short!

Your stories are so readable and enjoyable, I hate to see the end.
Don't stop writing, you are an inspiration to beginners like me.

Suicide cop out

Well written, weak plot without suspense or other tension, crappy theme. Suicide as revenge is dishonorable to say the least.