All Comments on 'Regrets...'

so well treated. very nicely done. a little more development would be super, maybe a little crafting of first line but still very good

Well done again. sweet O.

As always, nicely done. The contrasts and the balance between them made the poem a good read. I might suggest that for me, the rhymes got in the way. There were a lot of hard sounding consonants throught the poem. While maintaining the meter, I think more assonance would have made the poem better in those lines where tenderness was emphasized. I think maintaining the rhyme scheme precluded that.

maybe im reading this wrong, maybe its just me, do i hear acid dripping.

Killer jump start of a line, 5ed, well crafted and all that, but i hear overtunes, nuances, that etch some of the drippyness with acid.

5ed,5ed,5ed

Painful...but oh so true!