His Scheming Sister

Interesting Turn

This took a very interesting turn....I hope more chapters are planned.

Total Rubbish

Only good for the bin

Was doing fine..........

.......until you introduced mother then it became just plain stupid and a waste of screenspace.

premature ejaculation

You had as great idea going, but you came in your pants. This could easily have been three times as long and just as interesting. Develop the characters, do a few more chapters.

More, please.

You could write a book on this and still have to write another couple of 100 pages. Get to it. You are good.

leave mom out

great story but mom?
lil sis would be wonderful, but what is so sexy about her?
I have no clue.
keep writing fill in the blanks.

Its a great story but i want to know more about the wife the mothers ex husband. We want to know how it all got started and we want to know how its going to end now he brought his sister into it.