While the story itself is plausible to a point there are many plot and stylistic problems. I doubt a male would answer a door in a corset and stockings to a random person at the door during a physical engagement with another person. The quick way in which he enjoyed his friends company implies either a physical only relationship or a lack of caring about others.
The story itself had possibilities in creating a three way relationship, but much more development of the situation should have occurred.
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Anonymous02/20/13
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To the person that said a man opened the door... Read the story again. To the writer, good read I liked it. Check your spelling though!
English
Horrible
Badly written and just silly...
Shutters are on a house
"He shuttered..." should be, "He shuddered..."
Interesting idea
While the story itself is plausible to a point there are many plot and stylistic problems. I doubt a male would answer a door in a corset and stockings to a random person at the door during a physical engagement with another person. The quick way in which he enjoyed his friends company implies either a physical only relationship or a lack of caring about others.
The story itself had possibilities in creating a three way relationship, but much more development of the situation should have occurred.
liked it
To the person that said a man opened the door... Read the story again. To the writer, good read I liked it. Check your spelling though!
Another load of total rubbish
Crap
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