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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous02/20/13

5 stars

I love all of your stories!

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by jane marwood02/21/13

5*****

Loved it!

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by Anonymous02/21/13

AMAZING story, one of the best i've read! Would love to read more about these two.

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by Anonymous02/22/13

Hot!

I loved it! Made me very wet ;)

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by Anonymous02/25/13

Keep Going

I'd like to start by saying good story. I like the setting and the devices you used. But I really think you should continue this story as a series and expand on the new relationship between Mark and Hannah and everything that goes along with it in great detail. Things like them trying to get it on as much as possible while also trying to not be caught by they're parents or anyone else (such as relatives or personal friends or family friends), though an idea would be to possibly drag them in as well. Another part I would personally like to see expanded upon would be the impregnation/pregnancy side of the story. I believe that's a large amount of potential that's being missed out on. Hannah finding out she's pregnant and trying to hide it for as long as possible (and possible some lactation thrown in there as well for good measure. Hannah going to Mark to help "relieve" her of some pressure *wink*). There are a few pregnancy related stories that you should check out if you haven't already.
Some stories by the author SliderX. http://stories.xnxx.com/profile237038/sliderx
Sone stories by the author Lubrican ("Telling Mandy "No!"" being one of my personal favorites). http://stories.xnxx.com/profile407838/Lubrican
As well as "Addie's Babies" by Sakka.
Part 1: http://www.asstr.org/~Kristen/16/addie.txt
Part 2: http://www.asstr.org/~Kristen/34/addies.txt

I hope this helps and I hope to see this story continued. =)

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by Anonymous08/24/13

keep going and involve the mother as its clever the way you have done it keep going :)

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by sassysasha8908/31/14

The whole vacation

So hot!

More please!

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by Anonymous02/22/15

Wow

So where is the sequel?

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by mike250106/29/15

Well lets see, this one already starts with the dude supposedly chastising himself for gawking and lusting after his own sister. Umm... Yeah, brothers don't actually chastise themselves over shit like that, they just try not to get caught, unless, of course, the sister happens to like that and encourages it! ...so hopefully the dude isn't going to turn out to be a pansy assed pussy spouting the usual fake 'but your my sister' crap. That gets sooo old!

"" Besides, it was an innocent touch, like the way his fingers moved all by themselves and pried at the waist of her shorts daringly. He must have just been feeling a bit turned on by the girl his sister had successfully twat-blocked him from. ""

@@@ a bad plot ploy I see used often... Lame transference when we all know that he just wants to cop a feel on his sister. Even he knows it. @@@

"" "Alright already," she called to him, having redressed herself and emerged from the changing room, "you can look now Mr. righteous." She gave him a snooty look and walked to the door to pay for her new shirt. Mark noticed immediately that she had folded her yellow top half-way up and under, and his wide eyes gave him away.

"Jeez, what are you, my dad?" She probed him, "It's hot out here and unless you want to see me sweating, I'm going to fold up my damn shirt."""

@@@ at least she's calling him on being a total pussy. I mean, really, what is he, fucking twelve years old?! Ruins the beginning of a story when they write the guys like this :(
...oh wait, the plot just made it a moot point! Hehehe @@@

"" Halfway buried in his sister's pussy, Mark was afforded a second to gather his thoughts. Something had obviously changed between the two of them, and he was almost certain the old woman had not been brewing sugar-water in her dank old store. But the earlier feelings of guilt weren't there anymore, and despite that he knew he shouldn't currently be immersed in his little sister's quim, it didn't change the fact that he loved the feeling and wanted more. He had only entered her but an inch and she already felt unfathomably tight. ""

@@@ at the beginning of the paragraph he's halfway in her pussy, at the end he's only in an inch! Does that mean he has a two inch dick? Hehehe @@@

"" What was the feeling that had suddenly rushed upon her? All at once she felt short of breath and light headed. Mark could feel her relying on him to hold her up as he thrust into her. Her insides clamped down upon him and he knew what was happening. Hannah was confused and yet deeply enjoying the feeling of her brother fucking her from behind.

"What is.....oohohooo Mark... I can't breathe..... ughhh I feel like I'm gonna.... ooohhh." ""

@@@ She's acting like she's never had an orgasm before! Heh! While its possible I wouldn't have thought so with her the way shes written! You wouldnt think any girl that age wouldn't have had an orgasm before... Hell, I wouldn't have believed it, until I met my wife! I didn't believe her when she told me that she never had. Hadn't with a guy and not by herself either! I thought she was lying, but she was adamant about it. It was pretty obvious though when I went down on her the first time... None of her previous boyfriends ever had! ...hell, I should just take out a craigslist ad;
"'none of your boyfriends will go down on you and lick you to heaven? Email me, we'll have coffee at starbucks and chat then go out and climb in the back of my air-conditioned supercab pickup and I'll lick you till my face is covered in your sweet smelling juice and you're arching your back, curling your toes screaming my name and calling me your daddy, begging me not to stop!'"
...anyway, first time I went down on her after a while she started 'feeling funny', like she had to pee or something, then it got really intense and she kept telling me to stop. I knew what was happening though so I told her it was ok, just trust me, and kept going! ;). The next thing you know her back is arching and her ass is coming off the bed and Im fighting to stay on target! I had to wrap my arms around her hips and over her tummy to pin her down. Her nails are digging into my arms and she doesn't want me to stop but her body is trying to get away at the same time! It was a magnificent thing to see! One day Im going to set up a hidden camera so I can see it from a better angle, maybe set up my infrared camera too! Hehe. Eventually she came down, super sensitive, and pushed me off telling me to stop. I'll never forget her first time ;). God, I'd love to do that the first time to a bunch of girls! Hmm, maybe an ad at the local girls college!! ;)

Woo! Brothers banging her from behind in the alleyway, butt nekked and shooting a load up into her hotneSs! *LoVe PoTiOn NuMBeR NiNe* ;)

Gotta say I loved the story! Waaaay too short, needs three or four chapters, but still fun! They fuck in the hotel, in the bathroom at the restaurant, on the plane headed home, sister takes it in the hiney, sisters best friend catches them and threatens to tell unless she's cut in on the fun and Big brothers cock. Endless oportunities!

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by Anonymous01/12/17

Another good one!

I like your style. This one was extremely hot!



RaM

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by Anonymous11/30/17

Hot Stuff

Nothing like the love of two siblings with a little magic.

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