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by Anonymous

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by HarryHill02/22/13

nice one

one more read

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by Ashesh902/23/13

Tazz , surely you meant

Divergent people in a Divergent situation !!

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by erectus12302/23/13

very moving-5

accurate description of life, loving and the leaving, the growing apart , Well done. Thomas Wolfe said "You can't go home again" and that is generally the case, when you try you find the house is a wreck. Rebuilding on a weak foundation rarely works and the flood will always destroy it when it inevitably comes. When a relationship is good it is good, when it is not little will use to explain why they throw away their lives, what they do not realize is that the children suffer too. It takes great courage to break away....
As for a comment on the technical aspects, I might suggest eliminating these redundant lines "where his needs and wants
can’t bring me down"
and going right to the conclusion you state so well although the image (wings-flying) is apt but somewhat trite due to its overuse in songs and common expression, might there be another form of release and escape for our heroine?

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