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Get an editor
Please
edit.
This piece was decent, but the grammatical errors made it clunky. Have someone edit it before you post this stuff to get better results.
Another illiterate Paky imbecile writer.
Don't those darkies realize that they cannot write ?? 1* !
Interesting
While researching the Aqualounge I came across a different story first. (http://theeyeopener.com/2012/02/my-first-sex-club/ ) The story on the eye opener was written Feb 7 and this one Feb 26. The Feb 7 story is told from the perspective of the single girl. From the bad editing, it is clear that the author of the story above just edited each paragraph (while adding in a few of their own) to write the story from the perspective of one of the couples. Besides the editing, it was interesting!
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