All Comments on 'Everyone Wants Lolly! Ch. 01'

Sploosh!

That first sentence did not endear interest in this character. Did even less for the development of interest in reading further. I did read more and only confirmed that it was wasted time.

You have an idea and a scene in your mind but at this time your writing skill prevents the transfer of that scenario to a printed page.

Oh, I really liked this first chapter . Can't wait to read more .

Absolutely loved can't wait for part 2!!!

Great start, even I want Lolly. Hope this is going to be a long story, Can't wait for more parts.

This seems to be objectively written. It is analyzable and the game that the girl is playing with the grandfather and the rest of males, including the posture of the mother, can be interpreted as one wishes. Nice Story, looking forward to part 2

I liked it. Good job I thought this story was really funny. Can't wait for chapter 2.

Cum...er I mean coming, Lolly. Great job

Ee

I think you are a very clever author in that you wrote the story in the personality of Lolly... young, naive, sexy... so hot!

Thanks for the story and I look forward to the next part!

Hi,

thank you for this really good story. Would be great to read a second part.

Thanks

This could turn into a great saucy sexy incestuous story. Hope you continue to allow the family to naturally develop its sexual interests.

Oh please - pretty please write more to this tale :)

I am so fucking wet

This was so good! Made me soo wet! My panties are literally soaked. Waiting eagerly for the next chapter!

-xoxo

Still waiting for part two!