Not horrible, but really short of your better work. The main plot was ridiculous and even the sex was not as good as your usual fare. It's still better than a lot of what shows up on Lit, but it wasn't near as good as you can do.
that previous comment was a bit harsh. I really liked it, thanks for sharing the story with us.
Really waiting for you to finish some of your other stories Please.
I agree with last comment, I'm still waiting for you to finish some of your other stories, like Catching Mommy. This was good and all but not your best work, maybe if your mind was clear of the other stories you would get back to your better work. That is just a thought, but you could give it a try and see if it works by finishing the other stories.
Silk is on her game with this story taking a middle aged business woman and converting her to a pussy loving slut in record time.
Clever manipulation and lustful desire create conflicts that appear at times to be greater than can be overcome. Faced with a choice of becoming a submissive or loosing is something Silk creates with masterful strokes of the keys.
Does your mind crave lust and passion. . . read on. . . read on.
That was one gorgeous, hot story - one that had me quivering with excitement! You write such deliciously naughty things, SSL - and I hope you will continue to do so for a very long time.
Marvellous story - thank you lots - five stars.
You are awesome.!!!!! Hope you extend the story soon. XOXOXO.
I never want your stories to end! Give us a longer period of time as her serving as a slut, enjoying her new role and embracing it even more.
You always deliver exciting tales of internal turmoil and then dramatic release. Bravo!
As a woman myself, i loved the idea of putting myself in Cassies place. I wish this story would continue. This story was very exciting and well written. I wouldlove to see Cassie go deeper in her submission.
This is so fucking hot, keep 'em cuming!!!
I liked the plot, I liked the build-up, the psychological way of seducing Cassie into a lesbian slave!
Another great story by one of the best authors on the web. :)
I really loved the theme of a an older business woman being dominated by a younger bitchy boss. It is incredibly hot when the naughtier younger girl gets her way over someone older. This is definitely one of your better works.
I hope you don't take any of this personally but I just feel passionate about your work and hope you take in some of my feedback. :) Here is what I thought about this story.
I would have I liked less of the slow build-up of Cassie fantasizing about Amber and more of the slow domination at the end. I really liked the slow build up but I felt not much was done with it which bored me for a big part of the story. The denouement of Cassie 'giving in' to Amber's feet felt a little plain and quick for her personality. I would have much rather enjoyed a more creative form of submission where Cassie would have to keep demeaning herself to please Amber in nonsexual ways. Subtle things like making Cassie buy dinner, being insulted from comparing their bank balance, and just overall making Cassie believe she only existed to please Amber at her own expense. Cassie maybe even gets off on spoiling Amber until she has nothing left. Cassie the Marxian giver and Amber the capitalist taker.
The three parts of success that Amber tried to elaborate throughout the story could have been more interesting. They could have been used like training exercises for Cassies mind. The third rule about obeying superiors could have been reinforced with things like Cassie reluctantly masturbating to photos of Amber in her own privacy. Dressing for success meant controlling Cassie's wardrobe gradually. Amber merely dropping subtle hints of what she liked and Cassie picking up on her likes and still being treated dismissively.
One thing I felt lacking was the lack of friction from the age gap of Amber and Cassie. Amber never really acted like a younger bitch and seemed more professionally cold and calculated. Maybe this was what you were going for but it didn't make her seem very likable as a character. It'd be interesting if Amber used her youthful beauty as a way to consolidate her dominance over the older fading beauty of Cassie. Cassie doing things like painting Amber's nails makes her rival more beautiful while it makes her feel more ugly inside. It is like the underdog giving their competitor even more power over them.
You definitely did right on the parts with the foot/stocking domination as it played out throughout the story. The start with Cassie just putting on the shoes for Amber was like the start of the slow decline. I very much enjoyed Cassie fucking herself on Amber's feet later on. That was really hot. I would have liked Cassie to be forced to talk dirty about Amber's feet and how much she enjoys being dominated by it. Making Cassie defensive and weak when Amber finally brings up the topic would be an amazing read. Disavowing all her beliefs for her carnal desire to submit and get off at the feet of her enemy would be glorious. The might makes right mentality wins out and the spoils to the victor. Amber needs to get off on a power trip making Cassie admit Amber was right the whole time and fucking her feet was symbolic of it. Cassie goes from being the queen to a pawn for Amber's way of thinking. It'd be interesting if there were a scenario she had to lick the cum of rival male business owners off of Amber's feet as a form of double domination from her other enemies. There could be a number of reasons why her business is booming and making new reasons for more stocking/foot domination would be amazing. Being transformed into Amber's slut puppy definitely was a good move though. This was sort of all shown in your story but not really told thoroughly enough (at least for me and my sick mind :) )
I would like it if Cassie had to choose between leaving her business or worshiping the ground that Amber walked on. Acknowledging her station in life as nothing but a toy is delectable. I guess these parts would go on longer but it really wouldn't make much sense haha. The slow decline of a struggling business woman giving more and more to save er business but only to end up subconsciously giving in to her submissive side to her mistresses feet. It would be a fitting end to have her financially dominated by signing away her house, car, business. Her social life ruined by being blackmailed and humiliated through her friends and family. All the while she'd be a willing participant in all of it for a chance to be fucked over for a new orgasmic high or be in a state if constant horniness.
I still think your story was pretty solid and hope you continue writing great stories like these. Sorry if this got a little lengthy. I hope you hit other genres like fan fictions as well. :)
Hot sex, great story... up until this stopped being lesbianism and turned into pet play, and ended up with a completely fucking retarded "woofing". Fetish.
I very much enjoyed your story - can't wait to see how things play out in the end... and yes i still believe that Amber - no matter what she is doing right now - is doing it all to help Cassandra - and i mean REALLY help both on personal and business level.
looking forward to reading more
Very well written story, with a nice build-up. Great job!
A story with such a fun build up...although I agree that maybe the ending wasn't as great as the journey to it.
That said, still heads and shoulders above 98% of the writing on this or another other erotica site.
Great story. Bring down an insolent business bitch a few pegs down. One thing I liked was the humiliating changeover of Sophia from wife and devoted mother to cunt lapping slave. Hubby happy to have house to himself while wifey works from her knees pleasing new bitch boss in Paris. Why not humiliate her further by making chubby Sophia starve bto be thin and have a black stud inseminate her with sperm before she grows a belly in the states? Then hubby finds a biracial baby and mistress forces Sophie to give up custody of her children and family assets property to hubby while serving mistressnas cunt licker and babymaker.
I hope there will be more to this story
I want to be honest here. Bar the grammar (which you thankfully command quite well) this story feels as lazily told as any one of our friend Samuel.
Cassie's quick fall, especially the dreams that seemed to come out of nowhere and for no reason (were her drinks and food drugged?), seemed a bit far fetched, and there were more errors than your usual work. But still a fun read.
Well written as always, and a fun read, but I had great difficulty understanding the motivations of Cassie. From hiring a consultant who shows up hours late for her interview, to signing a contract without running it by a lawyer, to her inexplicable attraction to the vile Amber–none of it made sense considering the protagonists background.
I kept waiting for a revelation that Cassie had been drugged/subliminally brainwashed at the resort. That would at least explain the consistent dreams about Amber, and the almost hypnotic suggestive breakdown in Cassie's willpower when she confronts Amber.
By page 6 my only fantasies as a reader involved choking the living shit out of that smug, arrogant bitch and disposing of the body in some creative manner.
I think this story would've made much more sense in the Mind Control category, with the resort being Ambers base of operation for world dominance (her real degree was in neurology, and she perfected a mind control device). That could spawn dozens of stories, with an overarching plot involving Amber's eventual downfall.
it really felt like amber was lacking as a character. she and most of her army of pets seemed to be played rather flatly which resulted in an overall downer feel to the story not a happy one. most of your work gives one the impression that the protagonist or their target has found a good place. the end of this story gives no indication that cassie has done anything but trade her business away for being a sub. please dont take this criticism as anything other than one fan's view of your work. i love the majority of your stories and you've rapidly become my favorite author on this site (taking the place of a previous commentor actually ;) ))
I would love to see Mrs. Amber use her new submissive business woman to pleasure other business partners. As always, loved your story. Keep up the good work.
Loved this story, it had a good build up that keeps the reader wondering who will win then turns and shows that Amber will in the end. However, this story could have gone on for many more chapters. The possibilities are great for adding chapters covering a variety of submissive sex at the guidance of Amber. I was really hoping for added entries so maybe you can add more sexy chapters covering Cassie's complete submission not only to Amber but her other employees.
This is my first time on this site and I loved it. I could not read it fast enough just waiting for Cassie to have her first Lesbian experience. I , too, wished I was
Cassie as I was so aroused as it progressed past her dreams and into a reality.
IT was so hot.......thank you ! Keep writing.
I wish Cassandra would've ended up punching that bitch out and making her her little pet
I like reading your stories but this one is copy,Author call "tallblondegretchen" already wrote IN 2011 similar one "Black Alexis dominates white".I didnt expect this from someone like you
In reference to the last comment...
I read a lot of erotica myself and sometimes a story spurs on an idea. I did not copy her story, not even sure I read it, but the plot is not original..few are...
That said, I just skimmed said story and although there is a vague similarity..they are completely different stories...
Others please read and let me know if I am right or wrong...
Silkstockinglover, I agree with your assessment that "tallblondegretchen's" story has many stylistic differences with your 'Becoming a Lesbian Slave' work. This genre of lesbian/age/race sexual domination in business is limited by your readers own business experiences. In other words, the writers have to stay within some vaguely believable boundaries.
I will admit that you pushed these boundaries, using actual economic circumstances after sixteen years of Bush league incompetency and corruption. Personally, I agree with those commentators who are of the opinion this was not one of your better efforts. Your characters came off as caricatures without any explanation but a few vague hints of pre-story.
I think, if not right away maybe down the line, you should revisit this story. Consider using this posting as an outline of a broader, more in depth storyline. Provide the reader with a reason for wanting to understand these people you wrote about.
I've read TallBlondeGretchen's "Black Alexis Dominates White" before, and agree with SSL; they are more different than similar. The comparison hadn't even occurred to me until reading the comment. Once considered, I can see the comparisons: younger ingenue brought in to revitalize stagnant company. Beyond the premise though, not a lot of similarities. There was a comment on here that suggested having Cassie begin her submission by fetching her things, buying things, etc. Had that been the case it'd have been much more similar, but even then I wouldn't call it a copy. In addition, there was quite a bit of stocking-clad foot worship present in both but it hardly seems revelatory that 2 authors may share a fetish.
I agree with most of the comments on here. It seemed a bit disjointed. I expected her dreams at the spa in Hawaii to have been inspired by some type of hypnotic *something* (music she listened to in her room, while being massaged, whatever). That would have cleaned up 90% of the off-kilter feel the story had.
Most of what Bladeness wrote is very well thought out; having those elements would've made her downfall more believable as well as hotter, I think, but just adding something about the spa being where Amber sends her pets for hypnosis would've done it almost as effectively. I would just reiterate what he said in the first 6 paragraphs.
Beyond that, the characters definitely all felt flatter than normal. As some have said, still very good quality compared to the rest of the site, but I consider you easily in the top tier of authors. By the standards I have come to expect, every character seemed less defined.
Also, one post mentioned the woofing at the end; I agree. Just seemed off. I'm not into that kind of thing, so maybe that's just a judgment call rather than a valid criticism, but I don't recall that type of thing being in your other stories. Normally "pet" is a euphemism for slave, not like, I want to turn you into a dog.
Overall, I still really enjoyed the story, just not nearly as much as your other work. Amber's harem was never really explained either, which stood out; it could easily be a loose-end left for a sequel, but I hope none is forthcoming. I'd be much more excited by a new work, or a continuation of one of your other stories - either "Catching Mommy" or "Mommy: Becoming My Daughter's Slut."
However, I would be excited by any new story, and there were a lot of elements in the story that were well done. I hope I haven't come off a too negative.
Please right a part two. The story was so hot I can barley type. I hope part two has more of Sophia in it and more humiliation of Cassie; also don't forget about the weekend party Cassie should be serving. Page 7 was my favorite
Love Amber, she can rule the world.
Just read my first 2 stories of your particular warped genius. The SF drag queen being the other.
Alert!! I don't like lezzies, fags or blacks, but you write some serious hot shit wanker material. Thanx for the rainy day interlude. Oh, I forgot. Anyone who participated in incest should be gelded and sterilized
Very well written, good pace, believable characters and hot sex scenes made for a good read. I agree with an earlier comment about the dreams at the spa seeming to be some sort of mind control, and I think you could have shortened the story considerably if you had left out a lot of the spa stuff, as it wasn't necessary to the story. Because of these issues, I think it deserves 4 stars. Could have been five, but it wasn't perfect. Thanks for an entertaining read.
I didn,t know how wet I had become reading your story, until i went to the`toilet, then I couldn;t take my fingers away from my clit, until I visualised your face and mouth ordering me to please you by rimming and then sucking your clit.
I came, twice on my fingers and would want you to sit on my face whilst I lie on my back,
Loved the story and like the gradual submission of Cassie. This story really could have many more chapters and would really remain very interesting and hot. Extend the chapters, please!!!!
woofed? will cassie squat on the sidewalk to pee? chase cars? bay at the moon?
you are very talented making me cum on almost every page
I keep coming back to your work. If you ever quit, it'll be a sad, sad day for literotica.
I Cummed on every almost every single page my panties are very wet ;)
i congratulate you on the story and found it compelling. The style is immersive and engaging. While fantastical it doesn't require a total suspension of disbelief. The length of the story was needed and although i would have liked a more drawn out ending it merely left me hungry for further installments including the weekend party. You touched on a number of kinks i like including stockings, cunt-worship, feet, heels, petplay, humiliation, anal, speech and behaviour protocols, and possible use of 'mentalist' techniques. All without being so prominent to be obstacle for those not sharing those kinks.
i do hope you can find time and desire to further this story. And i thank you for sharing it with us.
Those last few pages may have been the most erotic thing I've ever read. Love seeing Cassie erode into a barking dog. It all left me wanting so much more. Cassie's mental state made me think she'd reached a point so fast and quick that she'd now be absolutely lost without a Mistress. I'd love to see more of this amazing story. Either way, thank you for writing this.
Amazing I thought it was great the submission of cassie. Kik frillysissyboy
Would love to read what happens next
after this story I had to change my panties they were soaked I would so love to be in cassies place
I'll love to read more on this story
One hot story.
another great lesbian story. had my cock so hard wile reading it. imaginging her fall her submission was so hot. to think that were you ended this story leaves a lot to imagine. like what will happen to her store and what role will she play in the future. i imagine ms. Amber using her taking complete control of her mind. making her fall head over heals in love and lust with her. i imagine ms. Amber having her sign over every she owns to her. both there pussies watering as she signs over everything to her hot sexy wonderful mistress.
so much can be imagined from your beautiful story. thanks for another great story.
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