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erectus123erectus123about 11 years ago
nice one

I might drop the word "sexual" from you line "As I lasciviously set your sexual soul on fire" as the poem obviously deals only with sex and that would improve rhyme and flow. There are a few other lines that might be improved by simplification or pulling out an unneeded word or two. Glad to see the fire is still burning!

Quivering_QuillQuivering_Quillabout 11 years agoAuthor
Thanks again for all your comments....

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