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by Winzip04210903/03/13

Birthday surprise

I liked your story a lot and am looking forward to the next installment.
What will you get for your birthday gift?

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by Dalain03/03/13

Meh

I got about two paragraphs in before I decided not to bother. Please get an editor to look over your work: you seem to have serious problems staying in the same tense from one sentence to the next, sometimes even within a sentence and it makes what might otherwise be an interesting story next to impossible to read.

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