What is this fascination you have with death?
In "Before I forget" you did an amazing job with the death scene. This one left out the actual point of passing, but touched that emotional loss.
Other than the quick passage of time for death till fuck, I don't have a problem with it, except that it denies the true sense of loss a long-time partner would go through, even after an extended "sick" spell. I can talk myself either way, but it might be something to rekindle in future sequences.
English
The subject matter does not
interest me, but, your style and command of the language is compelling.
Write on.
TUCSON
it's spelled T-U-C-S-O-N........
death
What is this fascination you have with death?
In "Before I forget" you did an amazing job with the death scene. This one left out the actual point of passing, but touched that emotional loss.
Other than the quick passage of time for death till fuck, I don't have a problem with it, except that it denies the true sense of loss a long-time partner would go through, even after an extended "sick" spell. I can talk myself either way, but it might be something to rekindle in future sequences.
great story so far
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