All Comments on 'Dew'

by SpringBreezes

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Ashesh9Ashesh9about 11 years ago
Moist pubes ...... Dewy lawn ! Boomin' thunder ..............heavin' hips !

Thank you for apt parallels , Ms. SpringBreeze !!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
A little late

A little late in writing but the praise is everlasting. Beautiful, sensual, moving and deep. You master words and play with them. Thank you. Xxxxxx

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Perfect. 3B

Just perfect. So beautiful, sensual and captivatingly lovely. You evoke so much in so few words. Very well done.

todski28todski28almost 10 years ago
sensual

Well thought out conceptually, great use of metaphor, sensuality, could probably find a different word to glistening to freshen it up a little, you interlinked the theme very well, smooth read. Your use of sound is strong as always,

Suggest switch

Tasting the chase

To

Taste the chase

Works better sonically and strengthens the word taste.

Maybe change clasp to gasp similar sound but a bit more illuminating than clasp.

Thank you for another string read

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