by ScarletSkies
But the characters seem simple and one dimensional. I don't believe Beckett feels anything for her but lust. The dialogue is meh, she doesn't want to be raped because "tis shameful" Really? Makes for a pretty wimpy female lead. And that Beckett would have allowed a child-like woman to raped as well.... No redeeming qualities at all! That being said I've read plenty of stories of the captured beauty and the handsome, roguish pirate so I think you have the framework to make an interesting tale, if that's your goal.
To 'this could be really good', I hope it does become exactly that after the story, which is fully in my head, develops. As to dialogue, I'm continually making an effort to improve at both character-accurate dialogue and somewhat historical sounding dialogue. This being my first attempt at an erotic story (big project for a first try), I hope my characters flesh out as my understanding of this style does. It can only improve from here! Comments are always appreciated.
You are doing perfect! I can't imagine it can get better but I won't complain if it does ;)
I especially like there's space for a bit of romance to develope . For me 'roughness' in an erotic story is another word for passion.Combined with a dash of romance it's heaven!
Too much stereotypical 'roughness' is just bdsm. Try to avoid it .
Just saying my opinion doesn't mean it's right..
Thanks
Please continue this story. I want to know what happen next in this story.