All Comments on 'Coda'

Love how the emphasis in the first two lines is in the middle of the line ..drowned/fled.

First stanza... breathtaking... but then..

..The second seems broken (oddly to me who knows little save appreciation) just to rhyme (kinda) the B lines

.. I'd love to change it to...

..

Along the circle's spokes, right at the heart,

there's evening sinking in this old world,

..

puts the emphasis back in the center...

respects always D, beautiful

Harry Tyro

blood-red sun, eh???

this nice

hazards of the unknown waters

end

this forgivable, playing to the audience?

new worlds to sail to and new songs to sing.

but very nice ring

And most assuredly recommendable SO

This is how the gods see us, eh? :)