by twelveoone
Hannah Barbera meets Master Chef meets No Country For Old Men.
Weird but interesting. I'm never sure how firmly your tongue is in your cheek or between your cheeks come to that but when your work is right out there, whether sarcastically or just for the piss take, its always surreal enough conjuror up acid laden imagery. Which incidently is alwasy worth dwelling on.
but every star was worth a laugh. Rhymes were great. More PLEASE
Lots of tricks from the magic bag in this poem. Easily a 5, it makes impressive use of rhyme, alliteration, assonance and even capitalization (though I'd have switched it so that "SPLAT," etc., were capped and the bits you have capped, lowercase). I agree with Bogus that it kind of doesn't matter whether this poem is intended to take the piss out of someone or just be a bombastic wild ride of words. Still, I think it'd be a stronger poem if you took out those last four lines, which to me seem meanspirited and undermine the wonderful semi-nonsense that precedes it. Just my opinion though, overall really cleverly constructed and a sonic delight. :-)
Quoting what Ange said but sitting on a skateboard going down a hill where road rash is inevitable.
Anyway, its Favorited because I laughed.
He from the yard? Sherlock? Or a turkey? Or something that rhymes with duck...?
Well, this was amusing. I better stay on your good side. :)