All Comments on 'Adam'

Pride gets in the way more time than not..... Interesting read, I believe you have a misspelled word in line 6..... Thanks for sharing...

first four lines, very good Consider line break here

shudder involuntarily

as lips trail from warm feet subservient

consider change

compromising positiong. to

my position compromised

last four lines say and do what you want

5ed

Pithy, precise and eminently recommendable - well done. S.O.