You Can't Do That! Ch. 03

liked it

Nice job on all three segments.

Interesting

Still not was I was hoping for but the addition of Sabrina helped. I look forward to your next tale.

NIce story ...

I like your stories. This one was very good. Most of the folks who comment don't really understand why they say the things they do about the stories they read. They are stuck in place. Damaged, so to speak. This story was quite balanced. Real, in many regards, even if it was a bit farfetched. I mean this is a good way in the sense that becoming a very successful writer is difficult. But it serves to illustrate the point you wanted to make beautifully. Thanks.

A valiant, entertaining but failed attempt to un-stripe the leopardess !

This installment would well have better on it's own as an independent story about a different woman. qhlm1 is a skilled author & nearly redeemed the miserable cunt, we all got to know in prior servings of this serial.

In the forced marriage counseling sessions, it came to light that each time Sheila had been caught cheating, she went into bitch mode. She had done this multiple times throughput the marriage & the inference was that she had gotten away with serial infidelity . Sheila was not able to meet his eyes when this accusation was made.

The evidence was damming that Sheila was a cheat,harpy and a shrew after the kids left. She was a decent mother & wife but not with an empty nest. All the hormones & therapy in the world can't change core facets of a person's personality.

Sheila was a inveterate nay-sayer . Roy's life took off when she left,no way any sane man buys into her psche quagmire a third time. Nice try by qhml1 to rehab this character. If the author bit doesn't work out maybe q should be an appeals attorney for death row inmates. ****

Good wrap up, well written series

I liked the way everything ended. Looking forward to the next qhml1 story!

Ok

Very good ending. She lost what she had, she gained something new and he has a ball. Thanks

completly unnecessary

part and doesn't help the story at all. the open questions are not answered even worse more questions are asked.

why does he not live up to : "But know this, the old saying 'fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me' applies here. It doesn't matter where we are in our lives, five years, ten, twenty, or past, betray me again and we are finished forever, understand?

because he is raised by women ? LOL who isn't !

she had several hormonal problems plus she had had a mild case of obsessive compulsive disorder. nice really nice, she is the only woman in the world who has to pass menopause and just because she is working in a hospital ( the only place in the world a) they have no clue about that issue and b) have an mandatory check up but can't read the results and c) doctors don't know anything at all) she was really fucked up and could not help it :-) .

then she went to therapy and counseling but of course her fucked up character remained the same.

the only thing that you really did , eventhough I asked myself already the last time, why did she setup her grandfather, you showed Kelsie is from the same breed. cold , calculated and for sure not loving. now she has 2 cashpoints so she can spend time speedboating.......

psychology can't be your hobby and just good writing doesn't make the jackpot.

you have now an old rich guy who sarcastically fucks everybody and gives a shit about the outcome. he knows he has just whores around him and just sees what happens next. maybe they fuck each other maybe not who cares.

but the good in all characters are gone. no love no warm feelings, if you add up or if a healthy person would add up these are just a series of new violations but they are so numb after what they have done to each other, they do not even realize it anymore.

very sad not erotic not funny nothing at all.

Sorry but this one did not do it for me.

The first chapter was great and the second one expanded on the information and the personalities but this third chapter did not do anything other than tarnish the original impressions. Great writer but the storyline sort of ran out....

Taking back, even in friendship or Fuck Buddies, a CHEATING SLUT is always a bad way to end a Loving Wives Story.

This story is no exception. The writing is very good; the plot sucks.

Two Cents

All worked well for him. You didn't write it but he never, even in the beginning, stop loving her. Reality was such that he could not, would not, put himself again in a position of deep emotional despair, he conceals it well but - hurts nonetheless.

Her free thinking, fun loving and mischievous nature, along with age and hormones, cost her something she now realizes was so much a part of her life and now GONE!
I give her credit for working it to being BF with benefits but we know, she will hurt from time to time, she'll have a piece of him again but never whar she once had. BTW, he has not stopped caring for her but he will never take the chance.

Sabrina, nice touch.

Thanks, that's my two cents.

Die!

Bitch!

Disagree

I disagree with some...I think this did "fill" out the story. I do think that he is too hard on her given the good years before it went to crap...Not saying it is all forgive and forget, but I think a quiet commitment (maybe including Sabrina) would be nice.

A very nice recap of the story

An enjoyable look to the orginal story, which I thought was very self-explanatory.

Thanks for the read...

I have no idea how ...

I cannot see how this episode did anything to better the story or explain anyone's motivation. She was a nurse for crying out loud. Hormonal imbalance should have been self diagnosed or caught by Sabrina much sooner than after a bitter divorce. She was self centered and incapable of a healthy long term relationship. That should have been evident early on. There is no excusing her behavior and those who continue to try and rationalize cheating behavior aren't getting it.

Thanks QHML for wrting this awful Mindlessly bad addition to this wretchedly bad story

the worst thing about this is that the author actually GOT his OWN story wrong..LOL...

YCDT

Please write to please yourself. Bottom line, it was an enjoyable read, thanks.

Can't understand

why you thought this segment was necessary

Thank you

Forget the critics and keep writing the great stories. There are a lot of us out here who thoroughly enjoy reading what you post. 5 stars. Thank you.

Feels unnecessary.

Commented in a similar vein on the previous story, but it feels like you added more "explanation" that wasn't really necessary to offer insight into the characters, just window dressing. If it was to emphasize what a dick he was, the first time they met, the way he repeatedly antagonized his wife and rubbed her face in her underestimation of him (that deck thing was a cheap shot, any guy who builds one out of nowhere knows better) and the way he insulted his current girlfriend Sabrina by asking her to indulge him in a threesome with the ex that cheated on him, Okay - so he's a bit of a dick. It's a flaw that makes him human, and it was obvious in the previous chapter as well, so what?

Like i said, this comes down to the fact that a dominant majority of LW readers are just plain blinkered assholes. Their first and only priority is to determine whether the guy is a cuck/manly man, or if it's the opposite number, whether he's "man enough" to get over it. Both groups are assholes and their input should be taken for what it's worth.

So why add another chapter of explanation? It comes off like B-2-B all over again, wrecking the story by turning your female coke whore into Super-Jesusette and whitewashing her psycho Redneck Mafia husband, because you're too busy trying to one up the retards by re-explaining concepts they can't and won't get because it's no longer about reading a good story for them. It's all about either making the bitch pay or making the man accept that his woman makes mistakes for these idiots. Not about a good story.

They won't get over it, because they can't. They're broken people who won't know a good story if they read it, and they'll ultimately just push you into wrecking an otherwise decent story.

Note: Cheating Wife "Alternative" PoV stories generally fail due to spending the majority of the story retelling what we already heard in the original format. You've offered a small amount of good, NEW stuff, but 2/3 of this feels like a rewrite of the previous chapters.

Critics can be foolish

The first two parts of the story were great by themselves. This third part is also a wonderful addition as it gives background on Shelia and her side of things. But I understood where and why things stood as they did after part 2. If other people could not understand that then they should have re-read the story. All-in-all great job ... not the ending I would have hoped for Shelia and Roy, but then I wasn't the author. And since you were, you get to decide how things should end.

well written as usual but frankly i dont give a rats ass about the cheating cunt.

Ch. 4? You Can't Do That!

Always interesting to hear the point of view of both the cheated and cheating spouse. Given what Sheila did when Roy proposed and how awful she felt when he left her, it seems a stretch to have her repeat that same mistake after decades of marriage. If you could have expanded on her rationalization for renting a condo and then leaving Roy, it might have made this chapter stronger. Did she want to have an affair with Dr. Feldman, so she needed her own place? Did she really need to leave Roy to see if she could start a new life without him? Was she seduced by Dr. Love or did she allow herself to be seduced to prove she was still desirable? Did she really think she would have a better life without Roy after 36 years together as a couple?

The real question is how could Roy and Sheila have stayed together that long without communicating and sharing each other's fears, frustrations, hopes, and dreams.

Sabrina and Billy divorce after years of a "happy" marriage and she ends up in Roy's bed. Really? I think there is another story with these characters to help them mature and finally become more selfless and insightful human beings.

Good Read****

Thanks for sharing.

Yawn

Good night. This was a snoozer. A boring recap. He was stupid to take her back when she cheated the first time, and he proved later he still was by rewarding her infidelity with money, and now she is his fuck buddy. Groan.

Her side added nothing except he is now banging Sabrina. Of course we now hear all about her WHOREmoans and OCD, Old Cunt Disorder that caused her problems.

Right...what happened 36 years ago? Was that WHOREmoans too??? Where is all the creativity that you used to have.

qhm1 must enjoy geriatrics. Pity.

Sigh, where's my geritol?

An interesting chapter. He was right to divorce her, even with her meds he should keep her at arms length. I liked the plot, revenge with a smile and she realizes he can get along just fine on his own thank you very much.

Captured my Interest

Very nice finish to the story, I thoroughly enjoyed all three chapters.
Liked all your other stories also.

WHY???

This adds nothing worth diddly to the Hubby story. Saxon and Anon 'completely unnecessary' are right on target! There was at least one important discrepancy between a compelling implication in Ch.2 and a denial of any additional peccadillos in Ch.3! Ultimately irrelevant.

Hubby has gotten richer because of Sweetie's disrespect. He did NOT get better!

4*

I really don't see what this chapter added

She didn't really add anything new to the plot, it really was unnecessary . I still feel the same way about the husband, yeah he didn't take her back & he didn't burn her; but how is having her still part of his life ( sexually) punishing her? The divorce couldn't have been the only means of punishment-- because though divorce they still do couple things & have a sexual relationship; so she's happy. I still feel he gave her more than she deserved. Why is it in every LW stories, the wives acts like a slut , gets caught by hubby , hubby divorces slut & wife goes immediately to therapy? Is therapy suppose to be some type of tool for skanks? I just don't get it. Why wasn't therapy approached before the cheaters spread their legs? What will therapy do? Will therapy help the skanks from spreading their legs for every guy who listens to their mundane problems? The wife medical issues can't really justify her behavior. I thought the writing was excellent. Another chapter wasn't really needed. I thought him fucking her friend was awesome, though it would be more awesome if he stop fucking his ex-wife.

If you wrote this chapter

to make us more sympathetic to the ex and understand why he didn't burn her to the ground then i don't think you did a god job, the same dilemma remain, being married to a person for over 30 years when the relationship was good most of the time as the husband says makes it hard to be around this person and get intimate with them and overcome the feelings of possessiveness, hurt, anger, and all these other negative feelings, this is why divorced people stay away from each other especially when the divorce didn't take place amicably and the couple were not drifting apart mutually and for a long time before it took place, in this case, the divorce was vicious and it came after a painful betrayal and he gave her more then she deserve just to get rid of her, to keep her around after all that is beyond comprehension, you didn't touch upon the point of other men in her life, did she give up everybody else just to be with him, she did refuse few dates but for how long,are you telling me that if he sees a man in her house he wouldn't be hurt, this is just like the romance stories on this site when so facts and logic is overlooked just for the sake of a happy ending. However, this story is so much better then other RAAC stories here and your talent make it more fun to read, thanks for sharing, waiting for the next story.

Thanks

Although it did not do any thing to add to the first two parts I can see it was not ment to, as this was from the wife's point of view. We also know some where down the line a three-way is going to happen.
Thanks for the entertainment. Mike from Texas.

Loved It! 5* and a FAV

Only comment would be regarding a critical piece of dialog that I would have expected when she came upto the deck and met him again. You had set the scene perfectly and brought us to an expectation, then just walked away from it without remark. Great writing and story thanks...

Chapter 3 failed to hold my interest. Chapter 1 and 2 were good, Chapter 3 was a dud. Did you loose interest in the story line?

Enjoyed it

After reading her perspective I am even more convinced he shouldn't have given her the time of day. I appreciate her side being shared, but it depended too much on the previous chapters and his side of the story. Since it is a different person telling the same story, it should be able to stand on its own.

4 stars

I gave the first 2 chapters 5 stars. I often like "her side" companion pieces. This was good, brisk, and interesting. It added to the originals. But, I didn't really buy the wife's cheating on hubby, as she told it. The problem is that she knew hubby was on to her (or at least on alert). She wanted to get back with him. She knew he was smart as hell. She knew she was this close to divorce. And, she does it anyway. Several times. With a guy she has no love for and with whom she has little sexual chemistry. Doing it to feel powerful? In control? Out of misplaced anger or resentment? Sure, I can buy that. And to feel attractive and naughty and desireable, too, I'm sure. And let's not forget about young. But still, even with a little bit of life-change crazy, she had to know the cat was soon to be out of the bag.
BTW-why the revelation about realizing she wasn't good wife material? That was never really addressed, and I thought the conclusion was a bit out of left field....
This chapter had more editing mistakes than your other work.

Nobody won

But really, maybe everyone did. He's no longer living an illusion. Sheila's no longer forced by societal norms to live a lie, and stifle her lifelong urges. She thinks she wants more, and thinks she lost, but she's free to do what she'll ultimately do anyway. Sabrina is getting what she wants, free from living in a marriage that was a lie. And Kelsie got her education paid for in a loving way, and gets some of the credit for his new career. Smiles all around.

Much Appreciated

Part 3 was a terrific portrayal of Sheila's character providing a convincing (and appalling) explanation of why she behaved as she did. She was so wonderfully selfish, irresponsible and amoral. The author included a lot of lovely touches to demonstrate what a unthinking slut she was. I particularly liked the way she described how she casually fucked around after he dumped her the first time explaining that as she was unattached no-one got betrayed. Except herself of course but that never occurred to her until it was much too late!

Why can't a woman be more like a man...

Someday I hope to write - and if I write as well as you, I would be pleased...

That being said... if'n the audience doesn't get it, then is it the fault of the audience or the artist? The trick I hope to learn is to say profound and unexpected things such that any idiot can get it.

But I do know the frustration of not getting through. I'm not sure what you were trying for (although I have my suspicions) - this one seems to be a slap at the Prof. Higgins out there.

The female leads' tendency to minimize the heart of the males around her is unfortunate, but fairly common... and the tendency to seek revenge, when I see it in a woman, is something that makes me walk, briskly, to the door.

Good story - I don't know, something seems missing though - a real sense of pain on the part of the protagonists? I sometimes miss the obvious... and perhaps you were trying more for comedic than tragic. Perhaps more ginger with your wry? Now that the female lead is over her blues, that could happen in a chapter 4.

Green-something

This story wasn't that good the first time

It really wasn't necessary to rehash it. You were just being self-indulgent. I wish you could write as well as you think you do.

Why bother writing the sane story twice

It just makes for a boring read.

No Body Really Won

I agree with a previous comments that no one won.
Shelia tried to control her husband she really did not know or have faith it.
I feel the husband now has the best situation as shelia is chasing him, other women chasing him as well.

I do hope there is a Ch.4 for what the ex husband does next in his life.

Well...I guess this failed twice.

First, I didn't get what the point of the first story was..at least as you implied.

I found the conclusion of the last one a bit out of touch with the rest of the story. Maybe it was he was busy tormenting his ex wife? I guess. It wasn't evident that he 'won' anything or that she 'recovered' anything.

Boy meets girl, girl fucks around on boy, boy leaves...man meets same girl as woman, woman fucks around on him, man leaves. ELDER meets Grandma....

A circle is always pointless...but why are merry go rounds so popular if they go no where? Because the ride better be entertaining.

This...told me nothing except that she was a biggger slut and stupider than she originally appeared. "Sure Shot Sheila". Huh.

First, don't pander to the audience. If they don't like the story, chalk it up to experience (though I'm tempted to rewrite IPO 4...)

Second, if you break rule one, DO SOMETHING DIFFERENT! How did this explain anything? How did it redeem anything or anyone? Her shallow motivations were pretty apparent the first time I read them...in the SECOND chapter.

Your first chapter had a bit of drama and tension.

Your second chapter decided to sell out to Disney. The only twist was artifical, hiding information from the audience to pretend to create tension (her first infidelity). It isn't tension if we already know the end (i.e. married for forever...)

And we ended with a schmaltzy 21st century 'romantic' ending.

Again, well written but gave me nothing but a filled in 30 minutes of reading.

Good story, really liked them all.

Listen, I loved all three stories. Honestly, I'm equally jealous of and elated for you. Your wife is correct. Very good writer. I don't get nearly enough time to read, but when I do? I'll be reading you for sure. So thanks!

Out of your minds

Anonymous and FD45 are showing their limited comprehension capabilities. Excellent stories! Yes indeed, I am one of those that "got it". Keep writing so we can keep reading!

Started great then ....

Sort of petered out. Sad.
In the end he was comfortable, she was trying for time number 3 and .....
No closure, no wrap up.

Mercifully, this story finally ended...

... but, really, wasn't Ch. 03 just a rehash of Ch. 02? Did we learn anything new about Roy or Sheila? Of course not. Shouldn't a different point of view add new perspective to a story? I think yes and, in my humble opinion, you failed miserably in this case. I'm not necessarily a BTB fan but really find the notion of ex-wife as girlfriend a bit stupid. It really doesn't make much sense that a shitty wife would make a decent girlfriend.

Really Enjoyed It

Your writing is so descriptive it had me flashing back to my highschool and college days. You really nailed the mind set of time period. When cops caught you drinking and driving they just made you pour out the beer commenting that not too long ago they did the same thing but it's still illegal. My close friend even had a red 67 Barracuda but we never thought of having sex under that huge rear window. Well, I didn't anyway. It sat so low it wasn't worth a damn in the snow. I remember having to push him out too many times. Thanks for the entertainment

didn't burn her

He rewarded her. It would have been better had he taken her back he could have gotten back some of the riches he poured on her. Damn what let down.

good read

hi.

i am not registered, but i enjoyed all of your stuff. it is among the best i have read here. thanks for writing it, and i will look forward to what comes next.

peace.
bill

WIN SOME.....LOSE SOME.....

there is never a break even some,. TK U MLJ LV NV

Comments

Now that I have finally read the last one I will comment on the entire group. You have a wicked sense of humor and no doubt one the top three on this site. Your stories all kept my attention, but I couldn't hardly do the transvites, but I even made my way through them. I damn near fell out of my chair laughing about the redneck funeral, I have heard tha really happens at many of them. I'm just an ole country boy myself, so that's why I appreciate yor style, by god it's southern for the most part, so please keep them coming.