All Comments on 'Illicit Lust'

Per say..... I enjoyed your poem and the implications that society (specifically morals from the religious sectors) have upon the conscious of women and to some extent men. Nicely done and thanks for sharing.

on rhyming couplets for start

parse this fragment

Body thirst for rapture of heavens ache

this is not real language - you are larding

depend more on this

render and reject as in

Covetous green eyes render and reject

and drop nonsense like Covetous (larding)

didn't vote