by Lauren Hynde
Would you change this line if you were writing it now?
"before I could feel"
Would: "before I was born" make it stronger?
I don't use the thermo-thingee
Tight little piece from deep in Lit's vault.
'Before I could feel' says more
Than a 'before I was born' cliché;
Let it stand as written.
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,500 poems.
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