Unexpected Revelations

The French Foreign Legion!

I love it. Just enough detail to make it known that he was in the French Foreign Legion: (1) the tattoo, (2) the phrase "redeem that old pledge of French citizenship" since all legionnaires are promised French citizenship, and (3) he spoke the local (Corsican) patois since the FFL has a barrack in Corsica.

So she has an affair and he had the guy snuffed or otherwise taken care of then happily ever after?

short to the point

liked it short to the point and moved on.

Excellent Flash Story

The Author's style is excellent. A perfect measure of information.

short!

Was that it !

For moment there I was expecting the husband to mention he made the lover disappear !

you should

have kept driving and not waste people time by writing, i don't see what your big revelation was.

Great, but

Really a great flash story. Readers have to accept that a flash story is SHORT, and like this one can be fun to read. But, please tell me what "2e REP" means. Thanks.

Enjoyable

I rather enjoyed the story. You ought to write some more.

Congrats on your submission

I've appreciated your comments over the years.
A flash-story, sure. Maybe it needed a little more story.
I was visualizing the scene, and it came across as a strange, extended commercial for Corsican retirement properties.
The dude took care of business, never clued in his wife, got on with life, so her confession was less impactful than whether there was enough vegatables for a frittata. Kinda funny.
Appreciated the clean, lean story. Hope you write more.

I would encourage you to...

Put some more thought into your story next time. I thought this was pretty well written and I think you should do more, but think things out; don't be in such a hurry to get it published; him having a flashback to what he did with the lover back then would have made it a much better story.
Also, never put things like, '2eREP,' I have not the foggiest idea what the hell that means and I doubt many others do either.

what 2eRep means

From Wikipedia. 2eRep stands for "The 2nd Foreign Parachute Regiment (French: 2e Régiment étranger de parachutistes, 2e REP) is an airborne regiment of the French Foreign Legion, stationed at Camp Raffalli near the town of Calvi on the island of Corsica, just south of mainland France."

Again there were so many other hints (well at least to me) that I knew 2eRep stood for something in the FFL.

Nice start

Mature men really do handle things much better than younger ones, if I myself am any example.

But a whole lot of who, when, what, where and what did he DO would help the tale a bit.
Thanks,
MGM

Big Opportunities for Psychiatrists in Cleveland!

"Oh honey, I murdered your lover. Let's have dinner and sex"

"OK".

Better test the water in Cleveland.

good

I very much appreciated that you did not reveal any kind of stupid violance in this story.

I liked it.

5*'s why? It was short and sweet. I normally would like more, but frankly this seemed just right. Excellent

"A young man will get angry about things that an old man is wise enough to just let go by."

In other words .. he has been a Cuck for so long that, just like the adult diapers he is now wearing, the horns his wife has hung on his head are now a permanent fixture of his life!

**Cheating wives are the lowest form of life**

Sweet*****

I loved it!!!!!!! John is cool and to the point.

That would be

5's from me too. I could see the whole thing in my head as I read it. It takes a lot of bravery to write with this degree of brevity. It also requires a level of trust that most of us don't possess. To write this way you have to have ultimate faith in your ability to sketch out the events with a minimum of words and details and you have to trust the
reader's ability to discern your meaning. I don't have it, so hats off to anyone who does. Shit, my comment is longer than the story...see what I mean. Great job! SS06

Now that was short and a great finish

New writer that was neat .i hope to hear from you some more. Please keep writing. A very good short.

Good story.

Not entirely sure how adultery justifies murder, after all, one is morally wrong and the other is evil. 4/5

2e REP

2e REP is one of the French Foreign Legion paratroop units. They go in when the going gets impossible. The men of 2e REP take care of each other. You understand what happened to the vanished boyfriend, now?

I liked the implication that he killed the guy but what the hell is "2e REP" that is a french paratrooper regiment. now if the guys name started with an "e" and it was RIP then maybe i could understand. or it was french version of rest in peach would would be "Repose en paix." In italian it would be " Requiescat in pace," or RIP.
so are we to assume that because they were in corsica and he ended with "fin" that 20 plus year ago he used french?
loved the story by the way. 5

Sounds like a young buck paid dearly for poaching another's private label.

I wonder what they had for dinner? The narrator probably knows how to skin & spit a hare. Call it a hunch.

Nice!

Viva La Legion! Looks like someone should have done their resreach before tapping
into someone elses wife! LMAO!

Good

I like the story, But it needed more.

It is my considered opinion that adultery doesn't justify murder

But far be it for me to tell another wounded man how to react.
When you fuck another man's wife, you're taking your life in your hands.

BTW

A terrific first offering. I look forward to more.

Oooh potential darkness

Short but to the point. Good mystery... Was loverboy run off or are some daisies getting some good fertilizer somewhere?

Good Flash Tale.

Spoiled somewhat by my having to Google "2e REP". Why not merely have a Tattoo of a Parachute and a gun.
But redeemed by the question left hanging " What did he do about it?"
Cheers and thanks
Kilroy

Gave it a 5

He made sure no other man would have to deal with that asshole fucking up their marriage. Bravo, but I still would be divorced. Great story

Details When?

If you have never faced the working end of an AK47, you will never get it. He did what he had to do ... Not so easy ...but it happens every day. Flash is OK but I need more. 5by5

A Gem

More please!

Nice

Since he knew years ago and took care (ha) of the lover her revelation now was just an afterthought to him. If he was going to leave it would have been when it happened. Oh well to each his own.

Good story

The point of the story was the husband's new outlook on life. Sold his company, last of children married off, living the dream perhaps discussed hundreds of times with his wife during pillow talk; life is good. He is living the laid back Corsican/French life where nothing seems to bother. Thus, the reaction as laid out in the story. What I like about the story is the very open ended-ness of the ending. The author could write a sequel, prequel, etc. But I hope he doesn't. Well done.

I like flash stories, especially GOOD ones.

Says it all. 5 stars

Anon

No self respect. Beyond the requirements of 1 star.

Thanks but no thanks

This was not "honey, it was ME that bent your prized driver!" It was their marriage, not a golf club or a dent in the car.

So basically the two of them lied, if even by omission, to each other for ~25 years. Is "wisdom", old or young, sweeping TWO major tenets of marriage (fidelity AND honesty) under the rug to remain for decades mixed with the dirt and lint? Only if you are truly not very wise. Yup, nice life. Not only what everyone hopes to have, but hopes their kids will grow up to have! Not.

Like--- good quick story.

I don't find the 2e REP reference any more obtuse that the references to SEALS, 82nd 101st MI5 or the calls for Semper Fi that pepper other stories. Actually I find it kind of refreshing that he "solved" his problem his way. The ambiguity of the solution... ran him off, waxed him, wrote him a pithy letter... is left to the reader. Personally a nice cool menacing was all it took to run the looser off... threats back by reputation have a way of persuading folks to alter their course. Good job!

Like it. Subtle...ish

I like this story. He (the author) did not say what happened. He just gave one, sorry two, clues. Brill.

For those who did not get them......unlucky.

I like this guy. TCB with no fuss.

So much conveyed with so few words. Bravo. Readers pay attention. He is not a lame cuck. He took care of the problem. That does not require a 'burn the bitch' response, if he didn't want that. It also does not say he killed or even harmed the dude. Implication is not beyond a resonable doubt. Although, since we were given a b/w line drawing, everyone will color it in with their own choice of crayons. Now let's go make dinner...

Not much of a plot

It has not plot.

So?

Good existential story about a vignette segment of life. So? is the question regarding what happened to the lover? Then again, if you filled in these blanks then it wouldn't be an existential story and you wouldn't be writing about a European vacation. I am guessing that, when we get into our sixties what we value changes, yes. Thanks.

Interesting tale 5*

So few words, so many ideas contained in them!

o_o

Where did the story go? The page is blank for me.

Heh

Page loaded finally. Short. But an interesting story. I would like to know how the neighbor disappeared though.

well..that was unexpected ..

well..that was unexpected ..

Stupid or Lame

I just can't seem to decide which.

Where the fuck is the story? page is blank.

28-03-2013

Went in yesterday thr'o loving wives genre