All Comments on 'Switching Bodies with My Sis Ch. 01'

by ALotInCommon

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ChasBChasBalmost 11 years ago
Now What?

Body switch stories can be very clever and interesting, but take a real talent to pull off. This chapter ended as the switcher discovered the fact, but not in a very interesting way. Should have brought out his feelings about it disbelief, terror, etc. So did sis take over his body in return? Is that Ch2? Hope it's better done.

SomethingInTheWaySheMovesSomethingInTheWaySheMovesalmost 11 years ago
Why so brief?

I have agree with the previous comment: body-switch stories can be really good, or really bad. This took a long time to just leave us hanging, and I'm not certain which way it might be headed. I also hope that it's not one of those "Chapter One" orphans that are never continued.

There are several ways to proceed with what you've begun: Her girlfriend was grumpy, but didn't seem to be shocked. Are we to surmise that the two of them fool around to some extent? And what is the sister experiencing? It's only logical that both of them are going to be curious to experience what sex is like for the other gender. Ideally, they're going to want to confront one another with their new/old bodies to brainstorm what they're going to do. Will "Britney" cut her vacation short to return home, or is she going to remain in Florida? What's the sister doing in the mean time in her brother's body back home? Would Allison go back with her, and when she gets home, would she "assist" the pair? Would she want the real Britney to take "her" new cock "out for a test drive"? Also, if the brother (since you never revealed his name) remains in Florida, the aspect of him having sex with guys while in his sister's body might be kind of gay, which might appeal to some people, but would probably be a turnoff to the majority of your readers. (Since, statistically speaking, the majority of your readers are probably not gay themselves.)

Lots of potential, but also a big risk of blowing it if you're not careful.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago

This story is really hot!!! Loved the panty sniffing I hope you continue to describe him smelling her ass and pussy In vivid detail!!! You have a real talent for writing about this fetish, please don't let it go to waste. Five stars and thanks for sharing this hot story, eagerly awaiting chapter two!!!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
stickler for the details.

3 paragraphs in and it's unbelieveable. The sister's 5'2' and plays varsity volleyball? "she had the body to match"?? Adjust the height or pick a believeable sport such as gymnastics, or make her 5' 10".

writerjabwriterjabalmost 11 years ago
Obvious who the author is

A high school girl with huge tits and ass playing volleyball. Lost me right there. I'd suggest you make your characters a bit realistic, even though this is fantasy.

SamiraNazirSamiraNazirabout 7 years ago
There's something wrong with you

Next time leave the sniffing part away and the smelling of piss ... bleah 🤕

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

I liked it and want more cus it describes me to a T. I so want to be my sexy ass sister in law for a week or 2 weeks of just dressing like a sexy slut like she does and giving my hot sexy ass body up to be fucked by any and everybody especially my wife well her twin sister they are 2 sexy little hot ass fuck toys with some big ass titties and nice big round asses and oh the best and hottest wettest most beautiful shaved fatt juicy sloppy pussies you will find on any other 2 hot little sluts around. I steal and smell and lick and suck on her dirty panties every chance i get and as im wearing a pair of black silk bikini panties right now and another pair of silk pink thongs with the crotch covered in white gunk that taste ohh sooo damn good. I rub my big fat hard clit cock through the soft panties and dream about getting my pussy fucked and being her hott sexy ass. And believe me she knows about how i stare at her hot sexy ass when shes around even in front of her sister my hot ass wife. But she also flaunts her sexy ass body in front of me wearing lowcut shirts or spaghetti strap tanktops with no bra and her big beautiful tanned freckled titties are just bouncing around damn theyre so fucking beautiful and she knows it too. Also wears little skimpy ass shorts or loose shorts with no panties or sexy panties and spreads her legs so that llong slit and beautiful fat pussy lips are right where i can see up the legs of her loose little shorts i mean my wife lets me act like her when we are wanting to get a little bit freaky which is always cus shes a real slut or bicurious she wants her sissys pussy in her face cus shes fucking so hott and just looks like she knows her pussy titties ass the whole nine yards is just the bomb i mean i think about her when i fall asleep when i wake up all day all night even fucking my sexy ass wife i mean theyre fucking twins and my wife is a total fucking freak a sexual freaking beast when it comes to the best pussy head i mean anything i want she does even treats me like her little bitch if thats the mood which im a total little sissy bitch and she puts on that big black strapon and makes me suck it and then rams it in my fat little sissyboy pussy and calls me her twin sisters name or lets me moan her sister name..how hot is that that my wife lets me fuck her and act like im fucking her twin sister. So its time to taste her bombass pussy for real cus just smelling and tasting all her dirty panties is hot and i come everytime big loads of cum but i want her sexy ass naked even after her boyfriend nuts in it i want to lick his cum out of her i will suck his dick just like her cus i want to be her and have her hot sexy ass body and the best pussy and hottest wettest. And big ass and most beautiful pair of tanned DDS u will ever see besides my wifes and my mother in laws. Hell i want to lick her pussy cus she made 2 daughters so fucking hott she has to have the bombass pussy which ive tasted her dirty panties many times i need to be my sissy too keep writing

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