Into the abyss

Not sure about the homeostatis

or the eroticism of firm round buttocks (which always make me think Monty Python) but the rest and indeed the whole of this verse is a delicious simile. S.O.

Beeyootiful ,

unconditional , submission !!--5-ed .

nice

this is nice, a very evocative description perhaps metaphor of an act without ever saying what the act is... unconditional submission ..

Very descriptive. I love how it is so descriptive but never gets explicit. Now, don't get me wrong, I enjoy explicit stuff, but sometimes tasteful is absolutely sexy. This poem achieved just that.

Keen visuals

A very creative and erotic poem.... Nicely done...QQ

I agree with momokapeach and cavu182. Nicely done, I also thought the enjambment was skillful, tying the lines nicely together. I like everything about this piece, except the title IMO comes close to being a cliché.

Wow! Thanks for all the feedback! I appreciate all of your comments. I am working on bringing out the imagery in my poetry, sounds like I'm on the right track.

I considered the title "skinny dip" as well...

Very sexy

I can imagine being there,

Lovely poerty

Still, subtle and yet so evocative.
Thank you.