4. My Father's Son Ch. 07-09

O.O

Just as I thought that things are getting better, you pull a fast one on me OTL
Still good though :)
(Oh, I have been waiting for your update. Thanks :) Now... I can't wait to read the next chapters, OTL)

Love it ...

i know it was written a while back and these are just 'repost' but i'm loving it :) even though this chapter irritated the crap out of me - don't these talk? can't wait to see what happens next !!

You do write very well, but I think there is a serious disconnect in this chapter. Nicholas is far too perceptive and loves Grace too much to not understand what her feeling are about the whole situation with Mai. Maybe he is suffering from PTSD and is not in his right mind, but the whole argument and the living situation is just off kilter.

Is there a missing chapter after Grace is taken to the hospital as she was shot in the fight with McCarrans men? When this series starts Grace is recovered and they are engaged, so obviously she did not die.

what happened?

Where's the rest of book three?

Another great chapter!

Thanks for posting so quickly. I got drawn into this story and then worried if the next chapters would be a long time coming.

You are a fantastic writer. I think you have written these stories a while ago. I am in the process of reading about Maya and Tyler and then will go back and re read Grace and Nicholas.

I like how you ended the Hamid situation quickly and did not let Nicholas become intimate with Jaidee. But now, Grace's heart is broken and I agree with the other poster. Nicholas was so in tune with Grace, how could he not know how she was feeling?

Your bio said you were not going to write any more. Is that for Literotica? I hope that does not mean, at all. I have REALLY enjoyed your stories and would love to see more of your work, current and future.

hmmmmm

Quite good. I have to agree w/ a few of the earlier comments about the unbelievability of Nicholas' behavior; I think Nicholas would not have said (2x) that Grace was acting "psycho." If he had said "unreasonable" it would have rung truer. But "psycho" in one conversation and in rapid succession? Nuh-uh.
The pacing was a little abrupt and not as developed as other chapters...Hamid's character was ripe for more development.
Loved the phone call and note. Leaving the ring surprised me, but in a good way.

Ooooo

The thought plickens. More. Soon. Please.......

grace is one selfish spoil little girl.

he should 've told her,but look at her responds.

I remember reading this story the last time Ava

and I'm so glad to be able read it again - thank you a lot!!! *****

Wth?

I love your writing.. but there's no way in hell I can believe that outside civilians were at that house/compond during the raid. Adrian and Grace should not have been there so quickly.... it's a major flub.

I think you're writing a little further out of your area of expertise than you were in earlier stories, but you're still maintaining reasonable believability . . .