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Jezebel's Tale Ch. 01

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous09/24/13

Ummm, well...

Pretty hot. But, the inconsistent viewpoint (jumping from first to third person and back) is really jarring.
Oh and those things on your feet are 'heels'

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by Magicwrtr09/29/13

Yeah

Those were supposed to be Jezebel's thoughts, told from third person. not first person. Despite not using the pronouns I or me I can see what you are talking about since I only said she thought once then followed it with three paragraphs of stuff. I will try and make that clearer in the future using single quotes or something.

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by Anonymous04/04/16

Dirty Talk

Jezebel knows exactly what to say!

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