Everyone has an opinion, or fav way that something is written. I don't think the author 'messed up' writing that way at all. I actually liked it a lot! Besides, it could only be considered messed up if you had specifically asked it to be written a certain way and the writer did something completely different! Hehe.
Mmm, that ni Ill look for the next chapter! ;)
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Good job ...
looking forward to this one's continuation...
A good start
Nice character development and what seems to be a good storyline start.
I hope to see more of this story soon.
Thanks for the read.
GREAT OPENING CHAPTER
I enjoyed this piece. It was a not too much, and not too little story. Just enough to make me look forward to reading more.
Sweet and sexy............
Lovely start. Please keep developing this story. 5 stars, you deserve it.
acoincidence of wants ch.01
they needed to fuck
Fuck yea
Great start hard as a rock
messed it up
You messed it up when you wrote it like a son writing a letter to his mom
Everyone has an opinion, or fav way that something is written. I don't think the author 'messed up' writing that way at all. I actually liked it a lot! Besides, it could only be considered messed up if you had specifically asked it to be written a certain way and the writer did something completely different! Hehe.
Mmm, that ni Ill look for the next chapter! ;)
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