All Comments on 'the year is one'

by sandyb

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HarryHill about 11 years ago

Silent revolution?

Sandy, I'm lost, but I loved this one. 5ed

Angeline about 11 years ago

There's a lot here that's so good

but it all comes at me so fast, with no line space for thought between ideas, that it loses its punch. And while I understand that an internal revolution has taken place it feels oddly passive. I think that may be because I want to know who the narrator is and why he or she is experiencing this: the narrator is not present enough. The poem has huge potential--some rethinking and revising can get it there. Just my opinion...