Castles in Spain

And?

Finish it please.

I stopped reading.....

when he drove her to the airport. Are all Brits wimps?

hate to say it but if he dies she should live in total pain until shes 95

women like this think they are special and thinking makes them think they have the only slut hole in the world. You protrayed her and her amore very well. He convinced her to tell her husband the truth but told his wife a lie. And she was to self centered to know it. He was of the opinion he could destroy her marriage but his was sacred.

guy had balls

gave her just enough rope to hang herself. then chance pisses in his cornflakes. hope he doesn't wake up with partial amnesia and she gets to spin some dumbass story. Better than your usual liked it.

One hopes her and her lover get AIDS and die slow, lonely, painful deaths

If

If you write the sequel, and there is a lot of material you can cover, please tell us Yanks what a "B & Q" is. I do not think it is a BBQ, ie. a restaurant, as we know them on this side of the pond. Thanks.

Don't know

I don't know if this needs a sequel or not. It is very self-contained and well written. On the other hand, who wouldn't want Dr. Cock and Myra to receive some payback. Although it is clear she is receiving some now, although at the expense of her husband's life/health.

Nicely done 5*'s

Dear Wimp aka matblackUK

Dear Wimp author, is there going to be a part two in which he comes back to his sense to BTB or are you going to gloat in your hatred towards men with such an ending? Please repsond.

Whore

This cheating cunt whore skank slut wife is the worst type of woman who ever lived. It should be her lying in that bed, only conscious and in pain.

Google B&Q

It's the UK version of Home Depot right down to the orange aprons

Is this a chapter one or was that supposed to be an ending?

This is a joke, right?

I mean, this plays out more like a satire than a LW story -- or any "serious" story for that matter.

You seemed to be going somewhere with this, until you used the accident to force some things that seems sort of like a resolution, rather than actually writing a real resolution. You have her blame Dr. Cock -- as if she was innocent. You couldn't seem to make up your mind if he was a wimp or not -- as is evident by driving her to the airport and never bringing up the notion of her not going. It's only AFTER she is away does her stand up to her. Big fucking deal.

This is just fucking silly.

Dr. Cock tells her

that he will lie to his wife and she should tell her husband the truth/ That makes zero sense. Would it not occur to Dr. Cock that Stan will tell Cock's wife of the affair? If you are trying to keep your wife from learning about your affair, you do not encourage others to spread it around. Just really dumb.

Closure...

This really needs more of an ending. Does he live? Does he divorce the mindless bimbo? Does the arrogant doc actually get canned and have his tarnished record following him around, what?

Follow up

So far so good but needs a second chapter to clear up all the loose ends.
To the anonymous american idiots,Limey? no one says that any more its so yesterday.Just shows the level of education and intelligence in America,low.

I have to agree on the closure issue...

One more line would have done it; As she bowed her head she heard the steady tone of the heart monitor and collapsed.

good

Good story. Like others I wish it was longer.

Good but unfinished

I've really enjoyed your development as a writer. Your character development is improved and your stories are flowing much better. I would like to see a chapter 2 or more of an ending though. Having Stan in a coma is an unsatisfying way to finish.

Excellent but...

MB,

Good stuff. But, like some of the others, I have tio say it needed to be longer. Not sequelized, really just longer. This storyline has real promise. I personanly do not care for serialized stories, though when I first started I was guilty of a few of them, because i am too impatient to ever be satisfied with ending I have to wait for.

If I may, keep the characters, as someone else said, "you're getting very good in that area," and develop a series of independent stories based on them.

Anyway, great job.

Matt Moreau

You obviously gve this one some effort, but...

..it just didn't work for me this time. You included all of the usual tropes, but there just wasn't any spark there, and I found myself not really caring very much about what happened to the two main characters. I'd would think a significant re-write is necessary in order to fix this one.

You might want to consider getting someone as a second reader to give you an alternative opinion over whether a story is really ready to publish.

Motorway story

Sweetie & Dr. Bull get togrther because of a spectacular vehicle accident. Hubby gets taken out by a spectacular vehicle accident. That's what you get for driving on the wrong side of the road ... Cuckolded and smooshed! (The Devil made me do it! That, and an inferior education in the colonies!) The author could have had a bridge collapse on, or a meteorite hit, Hubby's auto!

The author tasks a fellow nurse of Sweetie's to report the unprofessional activity of Dr. Bull! But she has NO standing, and more importantly, no direct observation and no evidence (except a bag of locks!). Given that such hospital fuckery is reported to be fairly common, the more likely outcome will be for the nurse to find herself in her new job in a Northern Scotland nursing home!

How does a steel floorboard disintegrate? Even it it magically manages to do that, how fast do airbags inflate? We're back to collapsing bridge or meteorite!

UK Matt has twice submitted a first chapter without Ch.01 in the title, but his most recent one DOES! Assuming this one-pager is complete, it is extremely unsatisfying! If it IS a series, I plead for the title to so indicate. My new policy is to NOT read until a series is complete!

3*. (Might have been higher if this was Chapter 01,)

mr. MattBlackUK:

you write a mean story! Concise, Intelligent, mind provoking, even funny at times. Please do not pay attention to those fools who so totally misread your writing. I would like to say sincerely and truly that you are among the very finest, cleverest and wisest story tellers here. Thank You.

Enjoyed it

I enjoyed this story and look forward to lots more of them

More

Come on Matt Black, you left the story open ended Just Plain Bob style... Where does this tale of betrayal lead ffrom here?? Is anyone going to ask if Dr Cock is honest with his wife about his dalliances? I think i'f want yo know that right before i shredded her passport.

Are their really women who think like this?

Seems to me....

You should finish this. Right?

Another top ten worst...

... horrid, simply horrid. Even if you were to finish this piece of shit, I fear, especially by the way that you've written Myra, this story will not go anywhere towards a satisifying ending. Better to abort this mess before it only gets worse.

Not One Of Your Best***

Thanks for sharing. A little more would be nice, but it's your story.

Twaddle

Come on matblack, where did you have your head when you wrote this, when was thelast time you met a nurse who after working a twelve hour shift as most nlw do, looking after upwards of 20 patients, had the energy to have an affair with an equally frazzled doctor. You have beenwatching too many hospital soaps.

you have done better

Not my cup of tea...you have more talent......finish it

This fucking sucked

you've only written one story where the man wasn't total navel lint. All the men either kill themselves, die from a boken heart, get smash to bits in a car crash or they are just plain cuckolds. What's up Matt, is this because Matt is part of your name. DAMN Dude.

20 years later...

She goes to work and comes home, still living in the same house. Stan is still there... a vegetable still in a coma. She steps in to the master bedroom where all of Stan's special equipment is set up and tells the day nurse thank you, she can go home to her husband now. When the nurse is gone, she takes Stan's hand gently in her own and cries softly, as she does every day. She cries for Stan, for the condition she's in and the fact she put him there. "I'm still here Stan. I will never leave you again" she says. She spends the next hour lovingly caring for him, bathing him, changing his clothes and the bed sheets, all the while thinking over and over again about how stupid she was. Dating? Nope... She's been asked, but she politely refuses. Divorce? Not a chance. She has a husband. A husband she disrespected so terribly she still can't believe it to this day. This is her life, and she is glad for what she has. Glad that she still has her Stan. Glad that she can still be near him. Glad that she can do these things for him. She responds to his every breath, every whimper, for she is a fool, but her love is true. She knows that now...

The ending?

Where is the ending?

I like this one and you don't need to write anything else about it.

One of your better stories

Yes there is an ending. That ending is like falling off a cliff, the sudden stop at the bottom gets you. The way it is written allows you to run different continuations through YOUR mind; or there could be a part 2 by the author.
I think you did a good job on this one.

Great story!!!!

A MB story comes like rich dessert after so much drivil on LW. Precise writing, beautiful character development, and genuine loving wives who just need a little more. This wife was so sensible in stating all the facts. I can see why Dr. Cock lusted after her.

One possible ending

To see one possible ending, see Stranger is the Sail by SirThopas, which is similar and to my mind a very good end.

Idiots

I really love how so many idiots here on literotica (most are American) can't seem to see the blatant difference between what is obviously a work of fiction. albeit a piece on one dimensional fiction, but fiction non the less.

I also find it very funny and quite interesting that most cuck stories are written by yanks, yet they keep on crying in the comments section and getting all psychotic over the stories.

I would also point out that most of the gay stories are written by Americans, as are the interracial ones. i guess all the male yanks are closet homosexuals who love watching their wives get laid by well hung black men.

Still i am not saying anything here that the rest of the world doesn't already know :)

Leaving a story up in the air

Is cheap writing,it is basically a way to say look how clever I am,I left it to the readerto decide.He lets her go away,drives her to the airport, and then decides to dump her?Also the story mentions having a kid,yet that plays no role in this ( what happened to the kid?Dad disappears,mom is fucking dickhed....kid takes care of itself?

Oops

No kid,that was another one.

Oh come on Harry you fuckin retard

do the math properly...

...AND THEN..?

.....come on even the not so remorseful would sob in a situation such as that....notice its your style to never finish your best works but this one is a diamond and you never even picked it up...

Anon

Mate, Writing isn't for you. Give it up.

Good story

Unfortunately there are a number of readers out there that don't like having to think about a story. This one made me think. I enjoyed that, so thank you.

No need for a part 2

The problem that twats like hueeeeedoggg and the other american retards have is that this guy was not a wimp and the story was written in concise English which unfortunately is not your average American's first language. Then again, their comments are meaningless and useless so it's best to ignor them

Dear anti-American idiots

Karen9876 who didn't like the story lives in India. Huedogg, who everyone likes to hate and call American, lives in Japan. If you aren't smart enough to actually engage the story, i suppose attacking people for their nationality - even if you get the nationality wrong - is the best you can do.

simple

Evil wins and the good lose, moral of the story.

Needs more

Methinks the story needs more.

Part 2 Please

Hi Matt.

I enjoyed reading this story. I'm hoping there'll be a part 2.

please do it right

need the wonderful doctor castrated. could use a propane torch to reduce bleeding keep hoping a writer will have the guts.