All Comments on 'Opening Gambit'

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twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 11 years ago
1B4

scratches his head

and makes ape noise

care for a cup of

mate

5ed

Ashesh9Ashesh9almost 11 years ago
Another masterpiece by Demure : this one on feelings , emotions ,....

Passions . Very nice .

greenmountaineergreenmountaineeralmost 11 years ago

Even those who think sonnets are passé might appreciate this. The fluency of the words impressed me the most.

"and not before time either" to be honest has me a bit stymied. I can make some associations with it, but I wonder if a more concrete word phrase might have been better.

Nonetheless, it very much felt like a "song" sung very well.

DawnJDawnJalmost 11 years ago
If he has to ask...

...she clearly doesn't want to try. How very sad...and what a great rendering of those terrible emotions! You're such a natural!

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