Great story for a first time, but there are a few things to improve:
1- Expand it- this was very short. 2-3 pages or more is generally a good length.
2- More interaction
3- When you get to interaction use dialogue, most people enjoy it, especially dirty talk when appropriate.
4- Keep writing!
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Excellent first submission
Great story for a first time, but there are a few things to improve:
1- Expand it- this was very short. 2-3 pages or more is generally a good length.
2- More interaction
3- When you get to interaction use dialogue, most people enjoy it, especially dirty talk when appropriate.
4- Keep writing!
very good start
Now let's have Mike destroy Vera's holes with his giant cock!
Is Mike bi
Is Mike 13 inches
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