- All
Comments (4) - Add a
Comment - Send
Feedback Send private anonymous feedback to the author (click here to post a public comment instead).
| Literotica Toy Store ADULT TOY & DVD STORE FAST & DISCREET |
Literotica XXX Webcams 24/7 LIVE CAMS - FREE PREVIEW W/AUDIO! |
Literotica Adult Movies STREAMING ADULT MOVIES PAY PER MINUTE |
English
more prose than poem
but still a nice capture. S.O.
Like this a lot
but I think in the piece the form works against the content somewhat because there are great lines like this one: "I heard once that penguins mate for life no matter because there is nothing in the world worse than a flightless bird." that get lost in the text. I'm guessing you prefer this kind of shaping and if so, you could still make the key lines stand out by cutting carefully what is around them. Just my opinion, but overall a poem full of action and disjointed jumpiness that grabs the reader.
Cursed with memory
Indeed! I've been saying for years that happiness is a selective memory.
Here though there is beauty in the pain.
A RAMBLING SEQUENCE
far from the asylum of thought. TK U MLJ LV NV
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to 666 or
More submissions by susansnow.