All Comments on 'A Night with Hayden Winters Ch. 01'

I think this is a good start BUT, I wish there was sex in this chapter. I don't want to see you move right into sex but I think you could have done good including a "first round" in the first chapter and go from there. With no sex, I am not sure how many readers will continue on from here. I could be wrong but I do not see as many readers continuing with nothing from this chapter.

That is my only criticism because everything else was good in my book.