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A Night with Hayden Winters Ch. 01

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by Anonymous04/06/13

Good but can be MUCH better

I think this is a good start BUT, I wish there was sex in this chapter. I don't want to see you move right into sex but I think you could have done good including a "first round" in the first chapter and go from there. With no sex, I am not sure how many readers will continue on from here. I could be wrong but I do not see as many readers continuing with nothing from this chapter.

That is my only criticism because everything else was good in my book.

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