by Cndrlla69
YOu focused on the mental and spiritual pleasures of first making love and that is better than just focusing on the physical. Loved your story
Jake's clearly a considerate lover. Carly's a very lucky girl.
I really like your writing style and realistic scenes you paint with words. Very well done.
This story is so well written and vivid descriptions keep you enthralled...love it!
Another great story that aroused me and drew me in. Very well written.
When I read the first paragraph, I was hooked--and it just got better from there. Even though the story is short, you've captured the necessary details to make it a great story.
Was this a Earth Day contest entry? If not, it should have been. Thanks for posting.