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Heather's Lesbian Roommates Ch. 01

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by Anonymous04/06/13

I hope that in the future you will have someone proofread your stories. There were many errors in the first paragraph alone, thus detracting from the reading experience.

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by Anonymous04/06/13

missing a few "bits"

The story is a nice concept, however, you might want to consider slowing down the pace and include words about the state of dress of the other two girls.

At one point you have Katie putting on a strap-on, sp I had to assume she was still clothed. Later on, Katie is thrusting her wet cunt into Heather. What was Lucy doing?

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