All Comments on '24: One Crazy Day!!'

Yeah I had a day like that once, got one ex-wife and two girl friends over the course of a day. Not quiet as athletic or energetic as your story and there was no getting shot, but I got my equipment in a vice like grip of the ex-wife's hand (good grip she had).

No, I have never had a repeat of that day and am glad I didn't. I had a good enough opinion of myself then, which has since been cured. Gave you 5 stars for the memory of an incredible day of my youth. Keep telling your stories.

Are we grownups or little children? Your f********g use of *** leaves a lot to be desired.

good story, but all caps for dialogue is really really annoying!

yep

the use of *** was kind of annoying but not a bad story.

Too much of a good thing can be fatal.

T***e were a couple of blanks I'm not sure I was able to I******y

What the hell is with the prolific use of ***s to make words unintelligible. The story was great, maybe even a good five, but the stupid stars bring it down to a three for annoying the reader.

I know it's your first, and a very good first, but the stars make it *******