by subwryter
This story is so unique. I am really looking forward to reading more. Thank you for sharing this.
if a plant can become upset about premature ejaculation!!!!! LMAO!!!
..how you wrote the character's personality via his sexual history in the first part of the story. I wish you would have put more detail into the second part. This is the making of a fantastic story if you intend on continuing/developing it. Loved the fairytale feel to it - 'Little Shop of Horrors' meets 'Jack and the Beanstalk'. Also loved the tightrope you walk between straight prose and allegory - incredibly effective.
I enjoyed this story. I would have enjoyed it much more if it were longer and more developed. Your idea is fantastic... just take your time next time... fill us in on ALL the details. What they're thinking, why they do things... mmm could have been 5 star delicious instead of just 4 star good. :-)