Widcard Talent Deals a Bye & Large, Bust Out Story
I've really enjoyed more then a few stories of this author. He has a way of gently subverting storytelling cliches in whatever genre he writes in. This story wasnt a disaster. Here and there his impish humor forced a smile with this read. The idea of subletting a felon's woman was amusing.
However, most of the rest of the story felt rushed & rooted in boilerplate bromides that imhapless usually avoids. The Sugardaddy to rescue of sweet but broke single mommy & offspring was more saccharin then frothy, guilty pleasure.
I still look forward to the next story by this author.. A brief look at IH's collection of stories reveals that this author's innate storytelling savvy will out sooner than later.
And you didn't run the ex-wife through a wood-chipper. Huzzah!
As I've said before, I could wish that the scoring system here allowed more nuance than a simple 1-5 ranking. I'd give this one about a 3.6, but I have to round that to 4. Good job.
My only complaint is that I don't believe Caley would agree to be pimped out. Which is exactly what his payout to Jack would be doing. He should have simply stuck with the divorce part. Perhaps she can use that to help rationalize divorcing the bastard.
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Anonymous04/08/13
Good
Don't like cuckold stories but this was o.k. If this guy was so great more on why his ex left and what she was doing would have worked better. Still good fantasy story.
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Anonymous04/08/13
Outstanding!
First story n a long time to show the decent side of a man. Every town in the U.S. has welfare mothers who have to whore out just to survive. If only there were many more rich old men to step in an rescue them. Even if it is still a kinda whore/john set up it is still the best for all.
Yep...interesting in several places, trite in other places. I dislike coincidences like Bush-I hates broccoli! Going to her apartment just-in-time to be a shining knight was over the top. It wouldn't have taken much for him to have been downstairs changing her tire or something when the thugs arrived and went upstairs, then Hubby hears the start of an altercation.
It was a pleasant read, and LSD (as is usually the case) pegged the IH record.
3.8 on the LordGro scale = 4*
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Anonymous04/08/13
So, the way this seems to work is that Caley is his whore, her husband is her pimp, and this rich guy is perfectly willing to help criminals, the kinds who whitewash their images and yet keep doing the same evil and illegal shit. Way to make every single person in the story except the kids an asshole.
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Anonymous04/09/13
Soooo
She did become a whore...just not for those 2 thugs.
Great story. Be interesting what happens in a few years. Thanks,
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Anonymous04/09/13
Why do ALL the psuedo intellects condemn good stories?
First...'5'
A thoroughly enjoyable fantasy story and very realistically plausible in real life.
Whore...BS.
Hubby the con, he knows damn well his wife would be ruined by the elements on the outside, including his children, and even without a payoff he knows she is well off with our guy...the lucky 'STIFF'.
A very entertaining story with a new theme. Thanks for sharing.
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Anonymous04/09/13
Nice try but
no lawyer would draw up such a contract without a wish to be disbarred. The contract is illegal and unenforceable. So, if you thought this would work for you, fuggedaboutit!
Perhaps not very realistic, but a great deal of warmth and affection. Uplifting, Thanks IMHAPLESS! Dan
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Anonymous04/12/13
Contracts, contracts ...
It's fiction folks, not reality. Of course the contract would be unenforceable. Most BDSM-centered contracts are the same. People still draw them up and sign them.
In reality any wealthy man as tough as this guy, with underworld connections, would probably put a hit on the jailed conman and claim the wife and kids for his own. But that plot is as old as David and Bathsheeba and derivitive. This story is sweet and original and gets five stars from me.
The contract as stated may not be enforceable - who cares -
Anything you want to have in a contract can be there if you get creative in your language since contract language is so malleable - the point in a contract is that both parties KNOW what they meant as well as what they said - since both were winning in this deal it is likely they could and even would have a contract and make it work.
Was she a whore now?? Maybe but she entered into the sexual relationship out of gratitude not for direct pay - so it is no different that most people who use sex as an inducement or compensation.
If she puts out after dinner instead of before is she a whore?
Is the guy with money being a jerk? Or good Samaritan? OK. So he bought off the imprisoned husband. The moron was a fool to jeopardize his family anyway. He did the crime, now doing the time. No matter how they got there, it would seem everyone wins.
Nice little story with decent writing. Thank you.
I love how people get all riled up about a fictional sex story. I liked this one. I might be the only woman to admit it, but the woman in the story got a good deal. I sure would not mind more detail about the sex. Especially the oral sex.
Thank you for a story of a great change. The narration as well the progress of story is well written. His open heart conversation in regard to sex and commitment is unexpected. I short the story is wonderful. Thanks again.
Good job. Tale was well thought and well told. You're a helluva writer if your other offerings are as well done as this one. Only thing I found a bit ... silly?... was talking about what a world class fuck she was. Seemed contrived and not something that would come up in conversation other than with a buddy.
Good story, and nice work if you can get it. Oh I think we are a little bit envious, of your generously helping a smoking hot young woman and her children.
Thanks, an inspirational story.
Good story but in reality someone as rich as he is, and knowing a crime boss, could easily remove any possibility of the husband reclaiming his wife. If he didn't want to have him killed he could just make it worthwhile for him to agree to a divorce.
English
Impossible
No one is this naive. and everyone is this tale is too naive for words. One thing I'll give this tale is originality. Keep writing.
Widcard Talent Deals a Bye & Large, Bust Out Story
I've really enjoyed more then a few stories of this author. He has a way of gently subverting storytelling cliches in whatever genre he writes in. This story wasnt a disaster. Here and there his impish humor forced a smile with this read. The idea of subletting a felon's woman was amusing.
However, most of the rest of the story felt rushed & rooted in boilerplate bromides that imhapless usually avoids. The Sugardaddy to rescue of sweet but broke single mommy & offspring was more saccharin then frothy, guilty pleasure.
I still look forward to the next story by this author.. A brief look at IH's collection of stories reveals that this author's innate storytelling savvy will out sooner than later.
Thank you
It's a good story and I enjoyed reading it. Thank you
Nice little fantasy.
And you didn't run the ex-wife through a wood-chipper. Huzzah!
As I've said before, I could wish that the scoring system here allowed more nuance than a simple 1-5 ranking. I'd give this one about a 3.6, but I have to round that to 4. Good job.
A very well written fantasy
I enjoyed it.
Well
My only complaint is that I don't believe Caley would agree to be pimped out. Which is exactly what his payout to Jack would be doing. He should have simply stuck with the divorce part. Perhaps she can use that to help rationalize divorcing the bastard.
Good
Don't like cuckold stories but this was o.k. If this guy was so great more on why his ex left and what she was doing would have worked better. Still good fantasy story.
Outstanding!
First story n a long time to show the decent side of a man. Every town in the U.S. has welfare mothers who have to whore out just to survive. If only there were many more rich old men to step in an rescue them. Even if it is still a kinda whore/john set up it is still the best for all.
A fantastic storyline
The story read like it was realistic enough to be a true story but left a feeling like it was a fantasy.
Well done.
Thanks for the read.
The Lords have it!
Yep...interesting in several places, trite in other places. I dislike coincidences like Bush-I hates broccoli! Going to her apartment just-in-time to be a shining knight was over the top. It wouldn't have taken much for him to have been downstairs changing her tire or something when the thugs arrived and went upstairs, then Hubby hears the start of an altercation.
It was a pleasant read, and LSD (as is usually the case) pegged the IH record.
3.8 on the LordGro scale = 4*
So, the way this seems to work is that Caley is his whore, her husband is her pimp, and this rich guy is perfectly willing to help criminals, the kinds who whitewash their images and yet keep doing the same evil and illegal shit. Way to make every single person in the story except the kids an asshole.
Soooo
She did become a whore...just not for those 2 thugs.
Borrowed
Great story. Be interesting what happens in a few years. Thanks,
Why do ALL the psuedo intellects condemn good stories?
First...'5'
A thoroughly enjoyable fantasy story and very realistically plausible in real life.
Whore...BS.
Hubby the con, he knows damn well his wife would be ruined by the elements on the outside, including his children, and even without a payoff he knows she is well off with our guy...the lucky 'STIFF'.
Thanks.
Very Different!!****
A very entertaining story with a new theme. Thanks for sharing.
Nice try but
no lawyer would draw up such a contract without a wish to be disbarred. The contract is illegal and unenforceable. So, if you thought this would work for you, fuggedaboutit!
Feel Good Story!
Perhaps not very realistic, but a great deal of warmth and affection. Uplifting, Thanks IMHAPLESS! Dan
Contracts, contracts ...
It's fiction folks, not reality. Of course the contract would be unenforceable. Most BDSM-centered contracts are the same. People still draw them up and sign them.
In reality any wealthy man as tough as this guy, with underworld connections, would probably put a hit on the jailed conman and claim the wife and kids for his own. But that plot is as old as David and Bathsheeba and derivitive. This story is sweet and original and gets five stars from me.
OK so good idea well executed -
The contract as stated may not be enforceable - who cares -
Anything you want to have in a contract can be there if you get creative in your language since contract language is so malleable - the point in a contract is that both parties KNOW what they meant as well as what they said - since both were winning in this deal it is likely they could and even would have a contract and make it work.
Was she a whore now?? Maybe but she entered into the sexual relationship out of gratitude not for direct pay - so it is no different that most people who use sex as an inducement or compensation.
If she puts out after dinner instead of before is she a whore?
This one is interesting
Is the guy with money being a jerk? Or good Samaritan? OK. So he bought off the imprisoned husband. The moron was a fool to jeopardize his family anyway. He did the crime, now doing the time. No matter how they got there, it would seem everyone wins.
Nice little story with decent writing. Thank you.
Pretty Hot
I love how people get all riled up about a fictional sex story. I liked this one. I might be the only woman to admit it, but the woman in the story got a good deal. I sure would not mind more detail about the sex. Especially the oral sex.
Loved it, thank you for sharing your stories with us! Alaska84
Selfless Love
Thank you for a story of a great change. The narration as well the progress of story is well written. His open heart conversation in regard to sex and commitment is unexpected. I short the story is wonderful. Thanks again.
Good job. Tale was well thought and well told. You're a helluva writer if your other offerings are as well done as this one. Only thing I found a bit ... silly?... was talking about what a world class fuck she was. Seemed contrived and not something that would come up in conversation other than with a buddy.
Preposterous.
Good story, and nice work if you can get it. Oh I think we are a little bit envious, of your generously helping a smoking hot young woman and her children.
Thanks, an inspirational story.
Good story
Good story but in reality someone as rich as he is, and knowing a crime boss, could easily remove any possibility of the husband reclaiming his wife. If he didn't want to have him killed he could just make it worthwhile for him to agree to a divorce.
Follow up needed!
Nice idea, Needs a follow up
A shame the thing with the husband wasn't resolved.
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