You're Mine and You Know It

Good start looking forward to next one

Love it

Good start love it keep it going

Great start

Please write Part 2 - I want to know how Jennifer copes with being a submissive slut

Hot!

Please do a second part!

hot

Such a fucking hot story can't wait for more.

Thank you all.

Thank you, I didn't know if it would be all that good but I'm writing part 2 right now. Thanks for the feedback.

PLEASE POST

this story was sooo good! I was about to cum then the story ended.please finish soon!

Muddos

Boy that was hot ! More please

more!

left me with my fingers in my panties. great story: i want a part 2!

you need to be controlled!

I think in part two you should have to be Ashley's sex slave and be totally controlled by her and her friends. You should be punished by being forced to have to wear a butt plug at all times and have it locked on you in either a chastity belt or a leather harness. You should be forced to exhibit your wearing of the butt plug in a public setting such at a gym work out or at the beach or maybe at the mall in a changing room or wearing a very short skirt and going up elevator. just my thoughts I would like read about. Kaylee in Arizona :)

Omg!! That was awesome, part 2 pleaseeeee!

good start

I feel you have a lot in you. the story was excellent but short for multiple part story. I could see this going a long way and in many directions. Looking forward to reading more. thanxs

You're Mine

I can't wait to get my lips on you knoiw where!!!

great start.i kook forward to.part two

Great start! Cant wait for part 2

poor

i can wait for part two about as long as i "waited" for the first part (about 38 years), which reads like it was written about robots, not humans.

What are you talking about. And I am talking to the one that entitled there comment "poor"

Granted it is your first story, but there is nothing at all to distinguish it from similar stories. Rather than a Part 2, spend the time thinking of something original.

nice

you are doing fine, it left me horny as hell and wanting more and isn't that kind of what you are after? keep up the great writing!

oh you have to continue

a nice set up should be continued

Loved it

Can't wait for part 2

please continue

OMG!! Love it so far! you have to continue. If this really happened to you...you are a seriously lucky bitch.

Oh my!

It definitely had me squirming in my seat, my panties wet. I can't wait to read more.

Amazing start. You should definitely should post a part two!

Thanks for the support I'm almost finished with part . And yes it is a true story that happened to a friend of mine, I just added something's to make it better.

Great start to a story potentially a series I hope, has me waiting for the next chapter soon as well

Oh my my

this is a true story I would loved to been apart of. More please

Awesome

HOT

You must continue....PLEASE?

Great Erotic Story

For the first time you did an excellent job. This was one very hot, sexy story however, it begs for many more chapters. The foundation is set for many more as the girl submits to all. Keep it going...thanks

Very nice start to what will be a great story!

More please...

Yes more please

Yes great begining keep going

May we have..

some more please?
This is really a good first story. I can't tell if I like it when you shift to Ashley's perspective or not. Of course, when you do it is only for a very brief minute. It does seem to add a special something to the Ashley character's dangerous, almost evil presence.

Thank you for showing the main character secretly desiring the humiliation. It bugs me when authors show the character being degraded, but not desiring it. Those belong in the NonConsent/Reluctance category. YOUR story does a wonderful job of letting us know that, while she is very low-key about it (and virginal), she secretly wants exactly what she's getting.
Please give us another chapter (or two!).

more go to read more

this was great your conflit wtih the girls is amazing

keep posting

I would love to hear what happens next

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I like that Ashley just teases her a bit, and doesn't full on get to it.
I think saying breast size measurements is completely unrealistic: women don't think in those terms, and frankly, many lesbians don't go for D or above that much. And also, shy virgins don't generally think that about their body in terms of "my tits" or "my ass".
I like how the main character shocked the girls when she was genuinely upset.
I think she was too quick to be a "slutty bitch" on the bathroom floor. Maybe a more timid submission would match her character background.
Do you have any idea how hard it is to "finger myself to multiple orgasms"? I like sexy, but try to keep it real or I can't forget that I'm reading a story written by a 'dude'.
Of course we all want the sequel, if you still feel like posting it.

P.s.

I also agree that it's cool how you show that she is 'secretly' submissive and that Ashley is totally on her tail/trail.

More Please

Great story so far. Looking forward to chapter 2.

I need more

A Great Story Teller

Like all the others I hope the next part will be written soon.

Finished.

Just posted the next chapter should be approved in 4days or so

Yes!

Please Please Please I want more!!

well wrote

ver y well wrote

love it

can't wait for the next chapter

Please post part 2